i like it, please update soon!

aww its so sad that liz has to move, i hope she can find her way out of it

can't wait to read more

update soon!

happy writing:D

i love it please update again!

awesome update, luvin it still!

update soon!

happy writing

please update soon!

I bet Mr. Swann is going to make it look as if Will did it, or will think he did it, which is not the truth.

good story :)

i love it! please update soon!

update soon

this really interesting WHAT IS OPERATION BREAK UP! I must know so, please update!

more more more more mroe!

nice chappie

please update soon

are any more characters (Gibbs, Norrington, Barbossa, etc.) going to shoe up?

okay so i read the whole thing but i have to post my thing here.

i think you should check your grammar. the sentences are to long when they need to be separated. it somehow takes the beef ot of the story.

do not get me wrong, its by all means good, but the grammar affects me and i think you should fix it.

You have ALOT of run-on sentences and some spelling and grammar errors. It's bothering me. But besides that, it's a nice concept and interesting story!

Watch out for run-on sentences. Some of your longer paragraphs are actually only one or two sentences. It makes the story seemed rushed. Of course one could say the complete opposite about my writing. I'm a very tedious writer and people may find that more annoying. Anyway, that is my only bit of criticism. Hopefully it's constructive and not just rude. I know how reviews like that can really get me down.

Otherwise, you have a good story going. I'd be interested in seeing Will and his parents, but do whatever you want with it. Keep writing!