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| pirategal101 2007-09-21 ch 7,  | abuseaww its so sad that liz has to move, i hope she can find her way out of it can't wait to read more update soon! happy writing:D |
| MaddyShay 2007-09-07 ch 6, | abusei love it please update again! |
| pirategal101 2007-09-06 ch 6, | abuseawesome update, luvin it still! update soon! happy writing |
| MaddyShay 2007-08-30 ch 5, | abuseplease update soon! |
| Smithy 2007-08-30 ch 5, anon. | abuseI bet Mr. Swann is going to make it look as if Will did it, or will think he did it, which is not the truth. |
| Alwaysapirate 2007-08-29 ch 4, | abusegood story :) |
| MaddyShay 2007-08-24 ch 4, | abusei love it! please update soon! |
| WeJm18 2007-08-17 ch 4, | abuseupdate soon |
| hurricane1714 2007-08-17 ch 4, | abusethis really interesting WHAT IS OPERATION BREAK UP!? I must know so, please update! |
| 4got2loginandistoolazy2doit... 2007-08-17 ch 4, anon. | abusemore more more more mroe! |
| ross ithil wen 2007-08-13 ch 3, | abusenice chappie please update soon are any more characters (Gibbs, Norrington, Barbossa, etc.) going to shoe up? |
| Dramaqueen247 2007-08-11 ch 1, | abuseokay so i read the whole thing but i have to post my thing here. i think you should check your grammar. the sentences are to long when they need to be separated. it somehow takes the beef ot of the story. do not get me wrong, its by all means good, but the grammar affects me and i think you should fix it. |
| whats.her.bucket 2007-08-08 ch 1, | abuseYou have ALOT of run-on sentences and some spelling and grammar errors. It's bothering me. But besides that, it's a nice concept and interesting story! |
| Lauren the Oxymoron 2007-08-07 ch 2, | abuseWatch out for run-on sentences. Some of your longer paragraphs are actually only one or two sentences. It makes the story seemed rushed. Of course one could say the complete opposite about my writing. I'm a very tedious writer and people may find that more annoying. Anyway, that is my only bit of criticism. Hopefully it's constructive and not just rude. I know how reviews like that can really get me down. Otherwise, you have a good story going. I'd be interested in seeing Will and his parents, but do whatever you want with it. Keep writing! |
| pirategal101 2007-08-06 ch 2, | abuseawesome update, aww their date was cute :) can't wait to read more happy writing |