Very nice story so far, though I'm a bit confused as it doesn't really follow the first Knight's Tale.
Oh and tell me if I'm wrong, but I get the feeling that the Dick Grayson in this story so far isn't the real Dick Grayson, is he?

I just saw this, clicked in, and read the first chapter. Somewhere along the line I realized that the "II" in the title probably meant it was a sequel to a previous story, but I decided to just go ahead and try my luck and see if I could understand what was going on. In large part, I believe I did. I mean, I didn't have a clue who "Ben" was when he was first mentioned -- though I immediately GUESSED he might be the child of someone I'd actually heard of before -- but I persevered.

By the time I reached the end of the chapter, I figured I had at least a rough idea of who had married whom, who had died (or was believed to have died), and who Ben's father was, etc. Although I still don't know if Ben ever really knew his father while growing up.

Incidentally, something odd about that -- Barbara introduces Ben to Lucius, and Lucius is surprised to find that Bruce (dead, I gather) had a son. Then Lucius says that if Ben is Bruce's son, Wayne Enterprises "will be yours one day."

But when Barbara first introduced them, she called Lucius the "owner" of Wayne Enterprises. "Owner" suggests Lucius owns all the stock (or perhaps a majority of the stock, since a moment later he corrects her by saying some of the company is still hers) in the corporation. So how would Ben expect end up owning/controlling the company, when he's not a blood relative of either Lucius or Barbara? If you meant to suggest that Ben stands to inherit a controlling interest in the company someday . . . maybe after he reaches a certain age and can take control of assets currently held in a trust for him, or whatever? -- then Lucius should probably just be called "President" or "CEO" or some such title, instead of "owner."

By the way, just how old is Ben? When I started wondering about inheritances and trust funds and things, I realized I only knew you call him a "young man." I don't even know if he's old enough to vote yet, nor how to visualize him!

And now for the Obligatory Nitpicking portion of our program!

There are a lot of little things that strike me as typographical errors. I'll offer a few examples. When I quote from the story I'm reviewing, I usually put the quoted material between asterisks -- * like this * -- to make it easier to see which words are the original material and which words are my own reactions to it.


* Ever since the explosion, nothing had been the same since. *

You don't need to say "since" twice in that sentence. If you just took out the final "since," the meaning would still be clear.

* The villians of Gotham had now ruled over Gotham, somewhat. *

If they are still ruling over Gotham "now," as Ben Walker stands there thinking about it, then you don't need to say "had now ruled." "Now ruled" would fit better.

That word "somewhat" bothers me -- I don't say it's bad grammar, but I do say it's awfully vague. It implies there are serious limits on how much control the villains REALLY have over Gotham, but you leave it an open question where those limits are. I'd like to know -- not necessarily in this sentence, but soon -- approximately how much control the villains actually exert over various aspects of daily life in Gotham.

* The former Commissioner James Gordon had retired months before, some partly due to the death of his son-in-law and grand-daughter. *

I don't know why that word "some" is in the middle of the sentence; I don't think it's necessary.

Also, I think that sentence should begin either:

"Former Commissioner James Gordon had"

or else

"The former Commissioner, James Gordon, had"

* One in which he named after his deceased son-in-law. *

"One in which" is awkward; at the very least, the "in" is unnecessary.

By the way, the name of Superman's favorite big city is spelled "Metropolis," not "Metropilis."

Those nitpicks are only a few samples of little glitches which caught my eye; there are plenty of others. I am interested in your story -- perhaps especially intered in figuring out just how much you've "changed" from the orthodox continuity (for instance, I gather the Justice League has taken heavy casualties, but I don't know exactly how many heroes died in the line of duty, or who they all were -- or if all the assumptions of death are justified; I keep wondering about this "Danny Mika" guy, for instance) -- but I suggest it would be a good idea to polish up those rough spots, perhaps by looking for someone to serve as a Beta and point out a few weak spots in your current writing techniques.

Dick is SO busted isn't he?

Aw, that's SO sad, they didn't make it out. :(
Great chapter though, I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next!