Wow. What an intriguing story.

not bad...i cant believe that schneizel dies because of a chandelier though

Lol.
It's not a lol story, but I smiled at the K+ for lack of moral fiber.
Anyways, very good. I love the simple sentences for big things like, Euphemia li Britannia died in her sleep.
Um. I wasn't quite sure if you spelled Lulu's sister's name right.. and I think you missed a couple commas, but really good!

I think I'd like this version of Death Note. xD