|Reviews for Linger|
| valkrys 8/9/07 . chapter 1
Now you broke me. Thank you. Thank you for writing the most awesome brotherly moment ever. The build-up to Dean finding Sam was teasing to say the least and I was once again holding my breath until he finally - stared at the gun :-P And you wrote Sam perfectly, the way he acted and spoke, just absolutely Sam in every movement.
When Dean remembered John, I wanted to cry so hard. Which again teaches me not to read ffs at work :-P Heartbreaking doesn't start to describe it. I wanted to hold him close, give him some kind of peace for his aching heart, take over the nightmares of remembering. So, I could've kissed you for having Sam there, for their moment together when they were not afraid to touch, to cry, to remember and accept. Most awesome scene ever. Thank you.
I loved how you resolved the story and I winced at the viciousness of Ben, although he did make a lot of sense with the rage about his father's death. More pain for Dean there. Give the guy a break! :-P
Loved also Kat's first encounter with Sophie and the boys' reaction to it. Again, wonderful lines and characterization with their movements, their eyes, just everything, actually. And Dean and the Impala, aw! I bet that was the missing part that made him feel hollow! :-P
Thank you for sharing this amazing story. Mindblowing.
| Rebel Goddess 8/9/07 . chapter 3
Got to grin at the use of Papillon. LOL at the scene between Sam and Dean about the jacket, bike and Impala. Dean really has a love affair with that car. You write their interactions beautifully.
One absolutely tiny problem: I think you don't mean "Dean man's blood" but "Dead man's blood" for killing a vampire. Unless Dean has heretofore unnoticed power? That could be cool...
The fight scene was very cool as was the reason the Latin went in the glove box. I also loved the reference to Angel. Gorgeous final scene. More stories please - this was excellent.
| LenJade 8/9/07 . chapter 3
Great ending. I love Dean and Sam. They did do the right thing... God it still pisses me off the mission John left Dean. I mean really. He should have just said "Save your brother." And left it at that. Dean would know that if he couldn't prevent Sam turning evil, then he would have to "save" him by killing him. He didn't have to add the whole Kill Him order. It just makes everything all twisted and dark. These moments wouldn't be tainted if John hadn't said that!
| Guest 8/9/07 . chapter 3
M...A song for me? Now I'm all impatient and curious!
"My name is Dean Winchester," he said, his hands up and open. "I'm here to find my brother."
"You think I've got him stashed somewhere?""
:D No, but I wish I did.
Oh," Kat shrugged, concentrating on her task. "I just remembered that your brother used the French word for butterfly."
"He did wha—"
Kat, sweety, you didn't think that was an important point to mention before? :P
"Sorry," Kat shook her head. "If it was made before 1982, I probably don't know it."
I've got this one friend who defend that no cinema existed before 1980, at least that he considers worth watching, and that pisses me off so much! :D
"He sighed, his eyes resting on nothing, his body screaming at him to sit down, rest, just stop, his head arguing that there was a job to do, and his heart, the loudest in the cacophony of rebellion inside of him, telling him to find Sam."
"It took every ounce of Dean's remaining energy not to reach over, grab Sam, and pull him in for a hug."
*Sigh*...But of course, he had to have energy remaining :P
"Dean braced himself. He felt Sam building up, felt a countdown in his head, waited for the explosion."
Aw (at Sam's story)
"Dean sank on the edge of the bed, then peered up at Sam through shadowed eyes. "Too much, Sam."
Wow, it's just me or Dean saying those words is sort of...meaningful?
Aw x2 at the whole bit of Sam holding Dean's wrist.
"You've narrowed the possibility of disbelief down to one thing?"
Love u, Sam :D
M...gotta go for a bit, I hope nothing happens to the open windows while I'm out...
You know what? I'm just going to submit this bit, and PM you the rest later, just in case. Just so that you know it, I'm loving this chapter so much!
| alwaysateen 8/9/07 . chapter 3
I love it! Wonderful last chapter! I'm suprised of you, two stories in a row that have less then 5 chapters! But they are so complete that they don't need more!
I would have like to see the Latin version of the paper Sophie have given Dean. It was perfect for describe all of this.
| lucy 8/9/07 . chapter 3
Very thrilling and well written story! so looking forward to your next story! :)
| I'mcalledZorro 8/8/07 . chapter 3
Great story, I really enjoyed reading it!
| lookaftersammy 8/8/07 . chapter 2
This story is awesome. Your writing style in this is exactly spot on, really really good. I must admit I'm a little lost by Sophie's plot but I'm also a bit distracted atm so its probably not you. I guessed the vampire bit with the padlocked fridge but great idea. Nice planting of clues, really well done!
| Sue Pokorny 8/8/07 . chapter 3
I've enjoyed all of your stories and this one was no exception. Fantastic the way you weaved everything together. I look forward to your next endeavor!
| jp123 8/8/07 . chapter 3
Another fantastic story.
| Guest 8/8/07 . chapter 3
First of all, Dean on a motorcycle…hot! Reminds me of Jensen’s Alec days.
O, I knew the moment I heard the blisters needed cleaning it wouldn’t be good.
I really liked this part:
“A slick sheen of sweat instantly covered his body as his legs disappeared and he sat down, hard, on the motel room floor in front of Sam. His brother's strong hands held tight to his upper arms, but he didn't feel the contact. He couldn't hear Sam's voice telling him to take it easy, easy… just breath, okay, I’ve got you… he couldn't see his brother's frightened eyes. He saw only the holes in his memory filling in with the devastating truth.”
A very nice visual. And I loved you referencing us back to the pilot…actually, I enjoyed the whole remembering scene very much.
And, we just watched Papillon not that long ago.
Awesome ending, not disappointed in the slightest...no worries, my dear, it was a great read. Can't believe you did that all in one sitting, though. Whew!
I'm afraid this review isn't quite up to par as deserved, but this is me at the end of my second wind, lol. Bedtime, NOW.
Thank you for sharing this with us, my friend!
| Agent Five 8/8/07 . chapter 2
The depth of detail is again amazing. And the small clues that you slowly release throughout the piece. You're an excellent suspense writer!
You have Dean so perfectly written (imho) and I like Sophie. I liked her when she rescued Dean, I liked her more when you introduced her Harley, I got more and more intrigued as you gave little clues and yet more mystery ... and now you add the sexy/dangerous undertones of vampire-lore and I'm in love!
Really enjoying this. It's a shame there's only one part left! But you say it's long? Awesome!
| Agent Five 8/8/07 . chapter 1
oh, man! where do I START? I love the style, I love the way I lap up your words, I love the mystery ...
this is awesome! and I appreciate the amount of research and attention to detail.
As for the basic premise that is Dean being rescued by a biker chick ...? you channeling me? lol. I'm in heaven!
| Maz101 8/8/07 . chapter 2
Oh this is great! For a moment there, when there was mention of leather clad girl on motorbike, I thought Brenna was back but you've presented another all new, believable, interesting character. This is a great twist on things we know - Dean's discoveries of his memories match my own need to know what went on. Well written!
| SensiblyTainted 8/8/07 . chapter 2
This is wonderfully exciting. I don't know what's going on with Sam. I can't wait for the reunion. I bet Sam is freaking out thinking first Dean is dead and now might be a vampire himself. Love your work!