No it's not crappy for me that is.In fact, I like it!^^

AW that was so adorable!
Love it!

aww, i luv this, so cute. leons 1 of my fave tales characters, so this story has well made my day.
It'd be cool if you did a second chappie, where leon tells rutee about his identity.
once again, a cool story. it's goin in my faves!
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Whaddya mean crappy? This was so cute!

I can honestly imagine the characters saying what you've simulated in your story. (lol @ Chaltier snoring) You did an excellent job staying true to their personalities! Keep up the good work!

*cries* WAHH!! LEON!

this was so sweet!! there should be more of this...and since you write so well...^^ *hint hint nudge nudge*

Nice story. You described Leon's plight quite nicely (now I feel sad for him T_T), and the storyline flows quite nicely from one scene to another (except the nightmare part, which I'll highlight later). Everyone else, including Rutee, is in-character as well.

The only thing is, the part when Leon was having a nightmare? It's not so confusing, but it could be better if written differently. Maybe the voices he heard could be in italics, or you could separate it from "reality" using a line break, or something.

But overall, it's a good story. Pretty sad, but sweet towards the end~

Well, except that I don't remember if Leon actually knew Rutee's his sister at that point of game. Then again, I haven't played ToD in years. O_o

Oh, this was so cute! I felt so badly for Leon through out the intire game. He just seamed so lost and lonely. This did an exelant job expressing Leon's inner thoughts. Great job!

This was a good fic. Though the begining was loose you grasped it around the middle and tied it at the end. Nice save.

I want to explain some writing and grammar to you, but I find it hard to do it in the little review box. xD

But I'm glad this wasn't out-of-character or sloppy, it was actually nice and in-character. I'm glad you wrote it, a745. You weren't even going to.

Funny how everything in the fic was unintentional and he got a hug in the end(which was unintentional) 'chance' indeed I guess. lol

Teefa: Aw...that's so adorable. It sounds just like what Leon's inner personality would be; after listening to the Drama CDs, I realized he seemed to greatly care about his sister when there wasn't anyone to hear it.

Lufia: Yeah. And he's always calling her "Neesan" instead of "Oneesan" at those times, which Sensei told us meant a closer familial relationship.

Rutee: (blushes) Oh that boy...

It's so sad, but so sweet at the same time. I love how you've portrayed Lion/Leon. The family thing was just great~ Thanks for sharing this fic.

Awesome fic, poor Leon... at least he got a hug in the end