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| bookworm2009 2008-04-06 ch 7, | abusea sequel?? oh oh oh...i'm loving it |
| saphiretwin369 2007-08-17 ch 7, | abusehm, well, can't wait for the sequel. |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-17 ch 7, | abuseYes, sequel! I loved this chapter and I loved the entire story. I really liked the Frank/Nancy part in this chapter, and the part with Joe and Bess made me want to cry. Fantastic chapter, excellent story! I look forward to the sequel! |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-14 ch 6, | abuseGeorge Frayne knew that this was the end of it. She could feel it, something inside her…was telling her. That was what she was thinking, as she laid in the hospital. She knew it. Last night she had been coming home from a long day at the office, she was tired…walking…the van had come out of nowhere. It was a miracle that she survived the night, and now she was dying. All that work, all those things the doctors tried, for nothing. She would hate to be them. But, that wasn’t what Georgina Hannah Frayne was thinking as she lay on that operating table. She was thinking of all the things she would never get to say. The doctors panicking above her were nothing but a blur. She wished she could tell Bess everything, why she had ignored her these last two years, and that she was sorry, that it was her fault. She wanted forgiveness. Closure, she wanted closure, because everybody needs closure. “I’m sorry.” Were her last thoughts, and words, as she died on the prorating table? And the thing is, she really was. Eep, that was so sad. It made me want to cry. Still...Fantastic chapter! Update soon! |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-14 ch 5, | abuseShe didn’t know weather to run into his arms or slap him across the face. “J-J-Joe?” Joe Hardy then did what he did best. No, not solve the mystery, But joke. “God, what is it with people and stuttering today? Frank did the same thing earlier.” He looked at her and she looked at him. Blue eyes met aqua. Joe Hardy then did the thing he was second best at. Ramble. “Well, um, I tried going to a candy store. But they were closed; guess not many people keep those sweet chocolate stores open at night.” Joe then bent down and picked up several objects. “Well, um, I come bearing gifts. I had to go to an all night convenience store. They didn’t have much…so I got you this jar of peanut butter, since you’ve always been a peanut butter person.” Joe then put his arm into the drug mart bag and pulled out the jar. ”Creamy. The good kind. And I brought you this bag of…dark chocolate Hershey kisses. Very rich…” He handed Bess the peanut butter and grabbed the kisses and proceeded to hand them to her. I think Bess was in shock. Lots of shock. “And lastly, I wanted flowers, but alls they had was this tacky light up red rose, so…” He then pulled the rose from the bag, turned it on, and handed it to Bess. “So, long time no see? Wow, wow, wow. I loved Bess and Joe's reunion! Nice work! I absoluetly adored this chapter! |
| boyzaremylife 2007-08-14 ch 6, | abuseaw, darn...you're a nancy/frank fan...didn't know that 'till now lol...but anyway this is kinda sad...about George dying...but it's still pretty good. There were a few mistkes (grammer/punctuation/etc), but it's pretty well written. Maybe you'll update soon? boyzaremylife |
| jemmy4life 2007-08-14 ch 1, | abusegreat story! i was totally hooked! but its so sad. great work! update soon! |
| jemmy4life 2007-08-14 ch 6, | abusethis is a great story! but so sad.. keep up the good work! great job. update? |
| saphiretwin369 2007-08-13 ch 5, | abuseWhat?! George is going to die?! That's so not right! But, um, great story. Can't wait to read more. |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-10 ch 4, | abuseIt’s Nancy’s fault… He thought to himself as he stared at the door harder, getting the nerve to knock. “Frank…What are you doing?” Frank spun around to see his brother standing behind him. “I-but-you-Why isn’t you inside?” Joe sighed and pulled out his keys. “I was debating weather to go out and get drunk at some random bar or at home. Home won.” Frank snorted. “I can’t blame you. Last year you got yourself arrested.” Hahaha. I loved that part. And I loved how Frank was thinking that it was Nancy's fault. lol. Great chapter! I loved it! Update soon! |
| whitetigers 2007-08-09 ch 3, | abuseOh, this is good. You got me hooked. I was reading all 3 chapters and got to the end and i realized there was no where to go! No!! I need the next chapter! LOL! Great story plot. Update soon. |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-08 ch 3, | abusehahaha. Frank and Nancy are plotting, I hope it will get Bess and Joe together. Fantastic chapter! Update soon! |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-08 ch 2, | abuse*sigh* This is so sad. But I absoluetly love it! Great chapter! |
| saphiretwin369 2007-08-08 ch 3, | abusesecretly dating him? Interesting. I'll look for updates! |
| An-Jelly-Ca 2007-08-08 ch 1, | abuseMean Joe leaving Bess like that. Love the story though. Amazing chapter! |