nice alternate ending. As with alley, much the same critique. A little too short for my normal liking but it was straight and to the point.

keep up the good work

Cool. Critiques first though-->

"She was afraid, she feared death." A comma isn't strong enough to hold together two independent clauses. You either need to use a semi-colon (;) or make it two seperate sentences.

You need to decide what tense to use for your third paragraph and stick to it. I think you should use the past tense because using the present after the other two paragraphs just doesn't feel right.

Okay, we have that out of the way. Next--> this is quite good. I like the story change. The way you've protrayed Samus's realization is short but effective. I'm glad that someone else understands that epiphanies don't have to be long-winded. Oh course, not everything you write should be this short, but this works.

The idea of a ghost scorning Samus is a really good way to describe her feelings. Then, passing that ghost on brings that ending full circle. Also, I enjoyed the line-" She knew for certain that she would die, but for some reason, she still hoped to survive." I shows Samus's exceptence, but also a piece of her want to live and fight again.

So, in closing-->nice job. This will go on my favorites. I don't visit this site all that often anymore, but I will look for more from you.