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| KingdomKey23 2007-08-14 ch 1, | abuseHey, guys. Good job on the story, it's not bad. There were a lot of funny moments in it. XD Like Ron's pants falling down, and Vlad's reactions to it, or Fry breaking the fourth wall as a flashback occured. There were some grammatical, punctual and capital errors, but overall not bad. The one thing I have to say though is I'm against the use of breaking into song in a written story, but since you two are my pals I'll let it slide this time. Good luck, guys. I can't wait to see who the Dentist is. Key19 |
| Annonymous 2007-08-08 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really like this story. Little Shop of Horrors is one of my favorite movies. Can't wait for the dentist number. Keep up the good work. P.S. On a side note Staredcraft-are you ever going to update "The Odd Trio" or has that story been abandoned? |
| charizardag 2007-08-08 ch 1, | abusedefenatly looks better here |
| tomboyishgirl108 2007-08-08 ch 1, | abuseAwesome so far! You and Charizardag make it a cool musical parody! (the original is always first, though). Update soon! Can't wait what happens to Ron next! |