Nguh. NGUH!

That, scarily talented young miss, is the sound of someone not knowing what to review when a fic impressed them SO.

Y'know, those italics were wonderful. And the way they were integrated into the story, ho yes indeed.

HO YES INDEED.

I need to read more of your work. It IS this good. And you are on my favourites ;D

..>.< Actually, no, it surprised me a little, because it seemed to be just... normalish...ish...ness...ish... at the beginning...

Uggh.

"Yes, you, me, and ramen. That's how I'd imagine my perfect world."

..I like it, and I don't know why. ...It's kinda... um. Dang it! can't come up with the word. It has a kind of... childlike quality to it, shall we say?

...No, I don't mean your writing is childish. I mean that Naruto's...

well.

wording problems here... um. Naruto... well, he's got a nice imagination: vivid and kyakyakyakya. :D And he still uses the nicknames!

What the heck did I just type?

I think I'm high off sugar. And I love this. FAvE.

That was really good, and really sad.

Very sad and cute.

I have been following your stories for..hm...2 days now, I think, and I believe you have become my favorite fanfic author! It's fairly hard to find good SasuNaru fics because even though the pairing is..well...it's the most (and pretty much only besides already married couples) cannon pairing in the entire series, many authors seem to...hm..."not do them justice" I suppose would be the phrase I'm looking for..? But the way you write, it leaves...a taste, a flavor, I guess? It gives the reader good feelings, because even if some..odd occurences..take place, the characters are fairly in character, given the circumstances. Even if the ending to the story is sad, it gives the reader a sense of...completion, that although the ending was not a happy one, they have had the joy of reading a well written unhappy ending. I think your stories are very well written, and the characters are portrayed in such a way that Kishimoto-sensei himself would chuckle with joy at such great characterizations. Oh, by the way, my birthday is very close to yours! Mine is September 3rd! Waa~ it's so cool, I think, that Sasuke, Naruto, and myself are all the same age, 16! Seeing as Kishimoto-sensei himself told us Naruto was created in 1991, and also that the Time Skip was 2 and a half years, that would make the characters 15. Well, 16 now, Because Sasuke's birthday was July 23, and Naruto's October 10. Haha, I get happy feelings for some reason knowing that we're the same age, with me being in between Sasuke and Naruto by almost a month each. Naruto was also born the day I almost was, except his birthday is in October and mine September. hee, good feelings from small coincidences.
Ah, sorry, I was rambling. But, back to your fics, they were really very well done! Besides it being hard to find well written SasuNaru fics, many authors put in "lemons", and I find that detracts much from the story when they are put in for no reason other than to have it there. PWP (here meaning "Porn Without Plot") does not...show a well-written story. Intimate relations between them are perfectly fine, but only if there IS a reason for them. People do not just one day up and say "Hey, I think it's time to seek out my best friend and do naughty (and sometimes violently so) things with them for absolutely no reason at all!" I can't see anyone, let alone these two, having such notions randomly pop into their heads. Especially Naruto, who is all about emotions and feelings and understanding those of others. Eesh, I've begun rambling again...um, anyway, the reason I decided to write a review was not only because I really admire your writing style, but I was inspired, whilst reading this particular fic, to write a short...something...of my own. I wrote it about halfway through the fic, because with me, when inspiration strikes, it wont let me concentrate on anything else until is has had its say. It's only a few sentences, but I hope you will read them. They were done very fast, and I decided to leave my original thoughts unedited, so it's probably very bad, but I just wanted to share them with you. It's written in Naruto's POV, to Sasuke. By the way, I'm sorry for all the "..."s in it.


I...always say how I have to fulfill my promise to Sakura... Thinking on it, it sounds as if the only reason I'm bringing you back is because of the promise I made to her. But…its more than that. I just…for some reason, don’t want to say that it's because of me that I want you back. Because…then I will realize just how much I miss you, how much it hurts for you to not be near…so, I always say “I made a promise to Sakura-chan!” but…even though its my nindou…I will never go back on my word...the promise I made somehow…doesn't mean anything to me anymore. It's not that I won't continue striving to find a way to bring you back...it's just…some things...don't matter as much, anymore, in the face of other issues. Right now, Sasuke is all that matters to me. Sasuke has always been, and always will continue to be, the most important thing in my life. But…I don’t know how...how I can bring you back home…so I become stronger. If I show you I am strong too, if I can, in some way, become stronger than you…you will see that I'm worth something. Worth the effort…worth it…because to me, you always have been. So, if you see a strong me, you might see some worth in me, and come back. Or, at least, look at me in the way I have wished you would since we were small… acceptance. So although it hurts, and there is only a tiny amount of hope, I will still pursue my dreams, and one day, I know they will be realized. Sasuke…I miss you.

Well, there it is. Oh, before I finish up, I just wanted to mention that I may be able to help you with Geometry as I took Honors Geometry in Freshman year (I'm now a Junior), and also, if it's not too much trouble, would you mind sending some recommendations for books and fanfics my way? I left my email, so I hope you can reach me. But, please don't feel as though you have to, I'm not forcing you, I just think that the sorts of things you read I would like also. Ah, a few authors I think you should look up are R.L.Stine, Tanith Lee, Tamora Pierce, Darren Shan, Phillip Pullman, Dan Brown, Zilpha Keately Snyder, Eoin Colfer(author of the Artemis Fowl books), Jane Yolen, Judy Blume, Carol Matas and Perry Nodelman, Lemony Snicket, and an author who's name I can't seem to think of at the moment ( he wrote the novel "Tell No One", it is a Best Seller and has an orange cover). On a random note, I love Japanese! 日本語はとてもかっこいですね？　大好きですよ！　でも。私はアメリカ人です。　日本語をべんきょうします。 Just a little tidbit about myself, I hope to be trilingual one day, English, Spanish, and Japanese being the languages I wish to be fluent in.

It is true, that this is used a lot.
But this is the best one I've read, haha, I know you've heard this before but I really think it's true.

How it would just cut off and have somewhat of a flash back.
I seriously love this. (Haha, even though I love all your work)

Shanks.
;D

Wow... I really, really, really like this.
I enjoy finding different ways/styles to write and that includes placement, repetition, etc. ... This is why I adore your idea:
" That doesn’t require much thought, because I already know I

love you, Sasuke, I love you! Just come back! We’ll train together and you’ll get stronger but just come back. Don’t leave me again. I need you, you bastard. I

love you. So, let’s imagine something new. " < that sort of thing. AND I'm totally jealous that you thought of it first :P

Style aside, I think that you did well to keep Naruto in-character - he hasn't had to deal with Sasuke's death yet (in the series), so who knows how he'll REALLY react? ("really" here, being à la Kishimoto)
I think this is a plausible reaction.

I didn't pick up any technical mistakes, so good job there! :)

I love this line: " I’m proud to be your closest person. " I don't know what it is, but this line struck me and for a moment I felt the pride that Naruto must have in this scenario. Just an itty-bitty moment. ;p

The ending did surprise me actually. I was expecting the ending to be that Sasuke was still with Orochimaru and Naruto was asking for him to come back, into thin air. I think it's the way you did it that makes the ending so good:
"Let’s imagine that when you killed Itachi, that you didn’t die too." < that, to me, is a very sad and sorrowful line. I can feel the heaviness of it.
Plus, I personally don't mind reading an idea that is "overused" in fanfiction as long as it is written well. All similar ideas become absolutely new and individual in my mind because of how they are written - the style, the quirks, the individual features that make the feeling I get when I read it something I appreciate/take to well. And that's exactly what you achieved here. :)

Awesome writing - I encourage you to continue writing like this because I find it very effective, interesting and enjoyable to read.

Thankyou very much for sharing this one! I really liked reading it and I will go on to read other fics of yours right away ;P

~Miss.Yamapi.Kara

hey. this was real cool. i liked it alot, especially with the little flashback things... I really like these kinds or writings. awesome~

You said that it was a deathfic in the intro, so I wasn't surprised. I did, however, think that it was taking place WHILE Sasuke was dying, until that last bit.

Ohh, the ending killed me! It was so good though. I usually dont get that into one shots, but that drew me in so quickly! I loved it, and I look forward to seeing more of your work ^^

AH! that's SOO beautiful! I can't believe ur only 13! i'm convinced i've read something of urs before but i can't think what! Anyhoo...


I really love this! It's going in my favourites! it's so emotional nd touching!

Aww... I just ran across it and what a coincidence, I just posted a death fic too... but uh, that is pretty crappy and creepy.

It is nice, sort of wistful, bittersweet halfway through, I guessed that Sasuke was dead—since I had just written something similar so yeah. Lol

The could have been scenario hits you, what if things weren’t the way they happened... it is a very profound thing and you have brought it out nicely, if I say so.

I don’t have much to say because this is a very short one-shot but I loved it nevertheless and uh, congratulations for your new laptop.

When is your birthday, dear?

Love, your overly sleepy seme.

Oh my God, it was beautiful. And the ending! I never suspected anything like that... Amazing really!

Wow...I thought that was beautiful. And you're right, I never would've thought the ending would be like that.

Damn, I'm depressed.

But you get a fave anyways! xD

I really liked it. The style was very pretty. The ending didn't really surprise me, but that may be because I read that it had character death. It probably would have surprised me had I not read that.

Don't worry, high school gets better, I promise. It will be over before you know it and you'll be off at college. I'm a senior now and I personally can't believe I have to start applying to colleges soon. I promise high school is fun, even if it's not like the silly teenage dramas.