The story is good... although odd because it moves like a vidfic with out warning. However it did fit perfectly into the ep. "Heero, distracted by defeat." the way I was expecting. It's also consistant with the theme in Gundam Wing of the main characters being the 'losers' a la Treize's speech to Romefeller. I like how you described the opinion of Heero knowing his role so well and accepting it despite that. How you described what he believed to be his one desire always being just out of reach... . and then slipped in the yaoi at the end. Some scenes (and the eradic change in scenes) were a little hard to picture in my mind but all in all, it was pretty good.