Wow, that was beautiful... I just love the flow and feelings, and the insights into Wilson's character!

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Oh wow. That was AMAZING. I loved the ending, it was perfect :)

Absolutely fantastic. I blame you for keeping me up till three thirty in the morning. Gah, and I have still more of your work to read... not too much of a hardship there, though. :)

*shakes head*

thank you for sharing your story with me

You drive slowly, sing along to a song you haven’t heard in years. The melody is almost upbeat but the words are sad;

oh. i've been there.

Aw, a cute and cuddly ending.

I read this last night, so there's no need to reread it. I'll try and remember some intelligent things to say. Okay, let me look over it one more time. Refresher.

...So, I lose. I read the whole thing over. I must say, it was more amazing the second time. Some of those lines I rushed over getting to the end were just brilliant.

I forgot that you were the one who was so fond of the parentheses. They're witty, honestly. For that reason, I wouldn't use them in too many stories. It would ruin the effect. I saw them in a few of your other ones that I haven't commented on yet, and will not do tonight, for it will soon be six-thirty in the morning.

I'm not sure about the believabilty of a lot of your Houses and Wilsons. But I actually don't think it matters if you've got their personalities down pat, because your stories are uniquely focused on thoughts and sensations rather than dialogue and personality. The tidbits of the charcters were convincing enough, if possibly not exactly spot on.

I really enjoyed the fact that it was from second person, something I haven't seen from you before and that you should, again, not overuse. It was something fresh and new in the voice of an author I've throughout the night become familiar with. I like that in this one, there's no rule moment where they slip over the edge. It's a lot of little touches and a lot of words that take themselves where they're meant to go. I'm especially fond of your beginning, though I couldn't really tell you why. All the thoughts in this narrative are so clear, so utterly believable. Do you fancy yourself like Wilson, or connect with him? You only use him, and you do it so well.

So, is this finished? If it isn't, I can't wait to read the end. In all honesty, though, I really think it could be left there. It's a nice wrap. All your endings are terrific, so either way, it doesn't really.

Alright, that's the end of my readathon. I read a few more of your pieces that I didn't comment on yet, but I'm not really supposed to be on this late (early), so I'm off. Thanks for posting all the brilliant work.

amazing. it's not finished, is it?

I loved the last line. Super amazing. Means alot. So great. I wish I could come up with better words but you took them all.

AHH!Hot and romantic! Loved it! continue now!

"that you’re surprised the love of your life is an old man who has more hair on his nether regions than on his head"

awesome

Wow towards the end I had no clue what was going on but then it made sense. Amazing story. Just great on so many levels. Thank you.

I didn't think this next chapter could be as good as the first and boy was I wrong. This was just as good if not better than the first.

"He scares the ** out of you sometimes; he has to know everything and you’re not sure if there will be any of you left once he’s explored everything he needs to see. "

And that's only a portion of what I loved about this chapter. I think I can relate to this stuff too. Man you are good.

Amazing part. Just great. Good insight into Wilson's life and a great look into a side of house we never see.