great job on part 3! i really enjoyed reading it. i felt like the there wasn't a clear focus in the plot on this part, but that's kind of a good thing, because it supplements what the characters are feeling while they are grieving...like they don't know what to do with themselves because they are so distraught. is there going to be a part 4?

great job with the second part...i think you wrote john well. i mean, he is a hard **, but he's human too...and you got both of those qualities through in your characterization of him. i'm looking forward to part 3!

i really liked part one of this story. you write really beautifully...with lots of emotion and imagery. great job so far. i'm looking forward to part 2!