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| Dinh San 2007-08-28 ch 1,  | abuseGood job, it is very well written, however I wish it was longer and that you had elaborated more on the characters. Everything seemed kind of rushed. James was mad and then 10 seconds later he had reconciled with Snape. I look forward to reading more from you. Thank you for writing and sharing it. |
| Drusilla Braun 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseI like this great job. |
| clarinet-alto-4ever 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good premise for a story. Your grammar is alright as well as your descriptions. I would suggest elaborating more. What are the characters feeling? Why do they feel this way? What are they doing while they talk? Stuff like that and you could have a very lovely story. I only wish to help, and I hope these comments did. Keep writing! |
| Mikee 2007-08-10 ch 1, | abuseThat was nice. I just wish it were longer. Sorry -- I'm sort of an obsessive Sevvie fan. *grin* Wish you'd consider making this more thn just a one-shot. Thank you. |