Really good, emotionally deep.

Nice work. I wonder if you're still actively working on it. I hope so. :)

Awesome stuff, I'd forgotten how good this was until I stumbled across it again. I do note however that it has been two years since its last update. Do you intend to continue it? It's just so good though! ;_; And there's not enough R/N around...

This is very interesting! I hope you're still writing it. :)

Awesome Chapter, very good story in an of itself.

I'm a bit worried by seeing the last update date, will you be continuing this story?

This has been a neat story so far. I'm looking forward to reading more.

Good luck!

An all-round facinating and engaging plot so far, I look forward to seeing where this goes. Wonder what Nabiki's reaction will be when she finds out about the agreement between the two families? :p
Hope you update soon.

Chapter One
Nagareboshi (Falling Star)

"Hai. I think we can do busi—"
[Obligatory Japanese. There's nothing lost in translation with the English 'yes'. Things like attacks (which are deeply culturally-tied and difficult at best to localize) or honorifics (things like '-chan', also culturally-tied) don't translate well and can be left in Japanese. Things like 'yes' and 'idiot' translate fine.]

"... Hai?"
[Obligatory Japanese.]

Nabiki got the nod. "Meet us in your room in ten, Oneechan.
['Sister', while not necessarily showing the connotation of 'elder' translates fine from the Japanese. It also won't confuse people who don't know Japanese, or confuse those of us who do and wonder why you're capitalizing a non-proper-noun.]

Remember your Shakespeare, Akane-chan."
[ There is more in this world than is explained in your philosophy. -- Hamlet ??]

Chapter Two

"Hai. Tendou residence...
[Obligatory Japanese.]

"Oh, my!" Soun exclaimed.
[Points: +1]

"Oneechan, was there a pool for girls?"
[Obligatoory Japanese?]

"So which one is you?"
[which one _are_ you?]

causing that worthy to take a mental step back.
[ causing that worthy?]

That was presumptuous of me."
[Yes, it likely was. Tacking '-chan' onto the first syllable of a friend's name indicates a very high level of familiarity; Western children might call it an inner-level-sort of best friend, and once they begin to reach maturity it's often used between those who are romantically involved.]

"Have you ever been hungry?"
[Knowing the answer to that question could change a lot of people.]

very much to the current point, contacts and references to be cultivated on her way to her goal.
[It's disappointing to think how much (more) of that is requisite in “success” - a person can be unparalleled in talent or intelligence, but without “knowing the right people” all the hard work in the world means nothing.]

for it was in solitude, she knew from long experience, away from the distraction of other people, that one could most easily despise one's life.
[One only has to feel alone to hate one's life.]

Chapter Three

"You saw him Wednesday after school, didn't you..."
[Interrogative missing its question marks.]

"that Father was a poor, itinerant martial artist before he married Mother.
[ And now he's a poor, ??

Been holdin' out of me, Oyaji?!
[Obligatory Japanese.]

That didn't mean, however, that he couldn't wind him up about it and hope for a slip.
[Quite perceptive of him.]

At a complete loss for words, he simply handed her the piece of paper he'd been holding. Confused, Nabiki took it and read aloud: "Saotome Nodoka, 138 Arisugawa, Oizumi-cho, Nerima-ku."

Chapter Four

coping with the emotional earthquake that had only been delayed.
[Hmm. Interesting way of referring to it.]

as they were,
[Since the subject referred to is 'uncertainty' instead of 'his emotions', I believe that should say 'as _it was_']

and dumped Nabiki onto the ground.
[If she's dumped on the ground then how would she just a sentence later 'pull away from his neck'.]

Nabiki is, to my mind, nothing if not quintessentially mercurial...
[I don't know, I think her motivations are some of the most straightforward of any of the characters. She's usually the most certain and consistent in her own plotting way.]

Kill the dubz! Watch more subz!
[I dunno, Ranma ½ was one of the better-dubbed anime. Particularly by VIZ, which is notorious for absolutely ruining their localizations.]

The characters are acting rather differently, even taking for granted the differences in history with Ranma apparently taking another year or so to reach Nerima. Canon Nabiki never seemed to have a problem with being a (relatively) emotionless mercenary, though she also never nearly died and never seemed to confront her mother's death.

wow, this is really, really good. One of the best, and most original Ranma stories I've ever read and THE best Ranma and Nabiki match I've ever seen. Amazing job.

I dont know how i missed this, but now that i've read it im quite excited aobut it, and would love to see more. Hopefully you'll eventually come back to this.

Quite different from Takahashi-sama's creation, but perfectly believable. All the personae are in-character with the possible exception of Kasumi, who comes across as more intellectual and observant than she is usually portrayed.(I'm one of those who believes that Kasumi and Ranma are both smarter than most people give them credit for, but that's just my opinion)
Good story so far. Thanks.
Mike

Fun story, Quite a bit different than the usual fare we get these days. Wish I'd found this a little earlier too. Ah well, Chapter 5 is going to be interesting if it ever gets posted.

really interesting, I love how you brought Nabiki down from her unflappable self with a viable reason too. Keep on writing.

I find this story to be very promising and would like to see more
chapter's of it. The idea of Ranma and Nabiki meeting like that,with out the father's messing thing's up has some appeal.

so when the next update to this fic oh great one... i like it very much... always did like a Ranma/Nabiki fic... lol

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