I really liked this- I think you captured the mood and atmosphere of the time really well as well as filling out Remus and Lily's relationship- well done!
Liv

Truly a piece worth reading; you really got the fear they had of the future as well as the hope they had for the future, especially the in the last big paragraph before the end. 'They were so young, so ready to live, and so ready to die. And what does one say, when one feels death so unbearably close?'