I like the name you chose for Sotrk's home terra. It sounded atmos authentic.

I am just wondering if you had watched 'Origins' I think it would help with your fanfiction.

I was so happy I found this and you continued this despite your loss. Fantastic job taking a risk and just jumping right in to create a backstory for Stork and Piper in particular! Like you said, it's rough creating a backstory this early in a show, especially when the writers take it in a different direction.

My favorite part of this story is that it feels just like a Storm Hawks episode. You captured everyone's voices and personalities perfectly, even if they just had a few lines or a small role. The sexuality was played up a notch more than usual, but it was really tastefully done. And besides, if I said I the lesbian subtext between Cyclonis and Piper didn't give me a warm fuzzy feeling inside, I'd be lying.

Overall, great read! Faved!

Wow. Beautiful story; I really enjoy your take on Stork's past. I never thought anyone could tell such a story in only five chapters, but I'm happy that you did.
Thank you for writing this.
~Ciel

This was great! *favorites* I am sorry for your loss...Its hard but still a part of life...keep your chin up and keep writing! *thumbs up*

What can I say? Wow - nice work...

The Best Storm Hawks story i have yet read, your storyline rocks, sure there was a few errors in there, notably you start of refering to the merbs home terra as Tenabes or something like that that apparantly means dismal and gloomy but by the last chapter you refer to the merbs home terra as simply terra merbia, other than that i loved it, sure you messed with the characters (storks mainly) background a bit, but you did it so well, i wasn't keen on Cyclonis been shown as lusting for Piper, i don't think even a one sided pairing of that nature works.

sorry if it seems like i'm criticing you, you had a lot of good stuff in there to, the reference to Stork been the surviver of the black gorge was brilliant and i too think he was the one who escaped from it, and the idea that the scared stiff overly paranoid and creepy stork is considered by his own kind to be a reckless adrenaline dunkie was fantastic.

it's the fic that makes the others worth reading.

The story was awesome. (And I fail at constructive criticism, yeah.) Really, I can't do anything besides run up and down stupidly and yell WRITE MOAR STORK-RELATED FICS!1 while flailing like a madwoman. Thank you.

you and your friend hve my respect.Im sorry that this happened to you but dont worry they are in a better place now.My dad died last year so i can simpithize with you.this is the only stork piper story ive ever read and its great.

I'm someone who would normally rather eat nails then read StorkxPiper, but you managed to pull it off in a way that someone who actually dislikes the pairing can not only change their mind, but enjoy the rest of the story as well.

I'm sorry to hear about your loss, it's never easy to loss someone.

Wow. This was a GREAT story. I wish I could've been around for this from the beginning, so I could've added to the support. I'm sorry I wasn't. I think I actually watched my first episode of Storm Hawks about the time you finished this...

But enough about me. Again, this was great. Amazing. I loved every moment of it. While I have another idea of how merbs live, it was a ton of fun to see, in-depth, someone else's background story for it. Thinking of Stork as being actually really brave and daring, for someone of his race, is how I've always pictured him. I figured that merbs just /don't/ fly, that's why we don't see any besides Stork on the show.

And the StorkxPiper aspect of the story? NICE. I like the pairing, and you pulled it off wonderfully, without even writing much more than friendship between them. It was just...ha, I'm running out of describing words. Shall we say, awesomely adorable, then? Yes, that about fits.

I don't know what else to say. I loved it. Absolutely loved it.

I'm sorry to hear about your friend. I couldn't imagine losing someone like that. I know it's been over four months since she passed, but I'm sure you're still feeling it. There's not a lot I can do for you, only being some person on the internet, but I'm sending you the best of my love and condolences through these words. I wish you much happiness.

Man, this is one AWESOME story! :)

I absolutely LOVED this story. It's one of the best Storm Hawks stories out there. Everything was so original and in-character. You have incredible talent and I can't wait to see what other GREAT ideas you come up with in the future.

Keep up the GREAT work! :)
KG24

P.S. I'm so sorry about your loss. But I'm glad that these nice people on here helped you out of your depression. I wish that I had found your story earlier, so I could have contributed too. Oh well, you still have my condolences.

I am truly sorry for your loss. I lost my roommate and best friend of 8 years five months ago, so I know a bit of what you're going through. She'd love this story, I know. All my condolances, friend. But things will be alright. Not right now, and not for a long time, but they will eventually be alright.

i am so sorry to hear about your loss...

i think its strong of you to of continued to write this awesome story through such a time...

*hug*, again sorry to hear and good story

Oh, this fanfiction was beautiful . . . the tale of friendship and love you've written about Stork and Piper was moving and beautifully written. I am truly sorry for your friend, but the fact that you were able to overcome your own sorrow and finish this wonderful story shows how strong you are--I admire you. You must have an incredible amount of courage.

I look forward to other stories from you, you are a very gifted writer!

God Bless, I pray for happier times ahead you, ones full of joy and love and healing.

- hazel

sorry about your friend
but i love your story
kudos!