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| Kiesha 2007-08-16 ch 1,  | abuseHoly flying crap. That is amazing and kills my brain. Even without being a shonen-ai person, I love this to no end. |
| Sky Falls 2007-08-16 ch 1, | abuseThis was done very well, one of the few good Sasori and Deidara stories out there. Awesome job! -Sky |
| Myou Matsuro 2007-08-15 ch 1, | abuseIt's a beautiful story. A sad, but beautiful story nonetheless. The death of Sasori must have been ** Dei in the canon version, whether it's shown or not. I mean, those two were partners for such a long time... Well, I think it's great how you portrayed Tobi as being more than he seems. May you have good waves this year... |
| Koji 2007-08-15 ch 1, anon. | abuse*sobs* ..so sad to forget someone who's important.. |
| MyMidnightLove 2007-08-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow, I really liked this. I think the beginning especially is very sweet. How Deidara just can't seem to make it as beautiful as Sasori could. Also, for some reason or another, I really wanted to say that the summary is very captivating. The only thing that bothers me is how easily Deidara got over Sasori, even with Tobi's help.But other than that, really nice piece of work. |
| MyMidnightLove 2007-08-14 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow, I really liked this. I think the beginning especially is very sweet. How Deidara just can't seem to make it as beautiful as Sasori could. Also, for some reason or another, I really wanted to say that the summary is very captivating. The only thing that bothers me is how easily Deidara got over Sasori, even with Tobi's help.But other than that, really nice piece of work. |
| Hugs Lee 13 2007-08-14 ch 1, | abuseThat was very good, but I'm slightly confused. Is there going to be another chapter, or was it just a one shot? Either way, very good writing! I found two mistakes when I read this. Number one: You forgot to put a quotation mark at the beginning of this sentence. 'But Sempai was on the birdie! Sempai's left was higher than Tobi's!”' And also, you spelled "renegade" incorrectly. Please continue the story, or at least explain some of the more confusing parts! |