I just read through the entire thing...and honestly...I don't get it. The plot is thoroughly under-developed, the dialogue is second rate, and the action is kind of forced. Time lines make no sense: one minute you say they've been together for months after the incident in the book and then later it's only been two weeks. I'm really confused. I don't think you actually paid any attention when you were writing. And then some of the reactions of people make absolutely no sense: why would Elle just stand there in her bedroom while a psycho is sitting on her bed? Seriously? My brain actually kind of hurts from trying to figure out what you meant, not what you wrote. Also...this is one big story...not many different ones. It was kind of pointless to post these under different titles, unless you're just wanting reviews...and that's just pointless as well. I understand creative freedom, but this needs a lot of revision.

Sorry for the bluntness. But, don't give up hope. Keep up the creativity, but ask for help from a friend or a beta. That can really help you further down the road.

Artee

Hey, nice story! but are you going to continue it? I'd like to find out what happens to everyone. And could you elaborate on who Jessica is please?and where she came from?

write more plz!
well your story was really great !

Okay, how can you just leave us hanging like that. You're evil!
No, I love you really. Please, please, please write a sequel!
Sophie
Xoxo

I think it was cool that you left the story with a cliffhanger, bbut i really think you should write another chapter to it or something.
*softballchica12*

Do tell that you're going to continue updating because the suspense is killing me! lol

hey that was good glad ur reconsiling will and elle as the are such a cute couple, please write the nxt part soon.

ok. here's what you SHOULD do:

- get all the chapters you've written for this jessica vs elle fic

- put them together

- repost them as a proper story with all the chapters included

but, anyway, good luck

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love it. i didn't think they had this story on ff. update soon

Your story is great.

I think your stories are awesome, but I'm not going to lie, I don't like the brevity of them and the fact that one story is spread out over a whole bunch of links. On another note, it's a great story and I really enjoy it, I just hope that you update soon!

i like the stories so far, how many more are there going to be? update soon!!