Oh my goodness this was amazing! I can't believe it. I just kept reading & reading, and when I got to the very end of this chapter, I was like: that's IT?!

Aha, wow. Your adjectives are something to be admired! I'm ashamed to call myself a high school student, because I had to look up some words like 'rancorous'. Phew, I can't wait for your next update!

THANK YOU for your decency in grammar and style. I adore your sophistication, and the texture of your pieces is fundamentally pleasing. Thanks for updating, and please do keep writing.

yes, having a peenis does give you some type of immunity.

i love the rewrite. looking forward to the next one.
kenni

Does having a ** automatically give you some type of immunity?

yes, apparently.

I loved this one, I think you characterized Temari perfectly. Amazing job. :)

Wow, this was a great characterization of Temari. So many people only expand upon her character in relation to Gaara, but you manage to cover that in an almost secondary fashion. I was especially impressed with the 19th depiction, and eagerly await more great things from this work.

As to why the Nara wasn't cut up in his battle with Temari in that initial strike, I've come up with three theories.

1) She was conserving her power. If the lazy jerk refused to take her seriously, she could simply knock him out with a minimum of fuss and use that power to more effectively deal with the invasion.

2) The attack was less focused because the target area was larger. The battle with Tenten was indoors, with a relatively small fighting space. The arena was much larger, and afforded more manuverability. Therefore, to deal with the wider range of attack, Temari might have weakened the power of her own technique.

3) Shikamaru might have found being injured too troublesome, and used the debree from the initial attack to deflect the worst of it, while using the movement of the resulting dust cloud to move just enough to avoid serious injury.

Of course, these are just my opinions. I could be wrong.

Thanks again, and great job! :)

Excellent! But if I have to read one for Sakura I'll kill myself.

This piece is really nice! I never really read a Hinata fic before, so this was a very pleasant surprise.
It was interesting to read about the development of a usually sideline character as in retrospect she really is a strong girl.. I especially liked the line "Little Hyuuga Hinata—timid, faint-hearted Hyuuga Hinata with her speech impediment and jittery thumbs—did what the Uchiha and Hyuuga geniuses weren’t able to. By strength of will, she had scorned Fate and determined her own destiny."
It just sort of solidified it for me, and you're right, she did overcome a battle Sasuke and Neji (though for Neji only at first) couldn't win.
I'm really eager to read the next chapter, hopefully it's about Sakura *wink wink* ;P
keep it up!

Well this certainly has my interest piqued.

I tried to read the entire story on your LJ, but I couldn't find the link. I would be grateful if you could provdie the direct link to your story so others like me can read it.

I know I don't have the paitence to wait for new updates.

This fic has so much potential. I can't wait to see how it continues. :)

"She was choosing her own destiny."

This sentence, as a parallel to Hizashi, is perfect. In writing, it's sometimes the shortest sentence that'll make your text, or break it.
The Hinata/Hizashi parallel made it. Congrats! You're a great writer!

Truly marvelous writing. Thank you very much for sharing. I would plague you with thousands of compliments and gush about how awesome the prologue and the first chapter are, but I would think, with this kind of writing, only one word would suffice: Beautiful.

this is even better than the first one on Hinata. it's more detailed and now i see why Hiashi resents Hinata, even through his twisted logic. please, please, please Update soon.

I liked number two because it shows why Hiashi resents Hinata slightly and is harder on her than on anyone else, because in his eyes she cost him his brother. It's not very fair especially on Hinata, but you managed to dredge up sympathy for both of them.
I loved how Kurenai was the first to give Hinata a chance and how she was a real parent to Hinata. Also liked how she was smart enough to answer the questions in the exam and what she gained from the exam.
I'm confused, it wasn't common knowledge about Naruto being the Kyuubi, none of the children like Hinata knew about it.
I adored how Hinata was stronger than Hinata and Sasuke by not choosing vengeance but by forging her own path and proving everyone wrong. I think the themes are royalty, because Hinata acted more like it the more people put her down, strength, fate and suffering. But then again I'm not that good at guessing things like that so I may be wrong.
Each one is really well-written and gives detail without being long and boring and I'm glad you gave justice to Hinata.

loove the new revision. i remember liking the piece about ino; however, i'm looking forward to sakura's piece.
kenni

very nice chapter
i love hinata's character development and how she overcame obstacles with influences like her jonin leader, naruto and her teammates
it's too bad that she doesn't a happy ending but most great stories arn't happy so i shouldn't complain
this story is so heartwarming b/c of hinata's bravery and struggles and heartSHATTERING becuase it's so sad and her whole life's an angst. This is the best hinata character study i've ever read
update soon?
-yeji301