Now I think I am starting to get an idea of what it might be, and what relation those artefacts might have. Although I would wonder how it was that had gotten free, although it will be interesting to see if I am correct.
Again, things are developing nicely. I can't help but wonder exactly what is happening as Sai's words seem at odds with what is happening, but I am sure that all will be revealed in time.
One way or another, it seems that his children have been playing dangerous games and if they are not cdareful they may run into things they I suspect are not ready to find out.
(I'm sorry I didn't review as soon as I saw you updated; I've been kinda busy. XD)
I must say, you caught me by surprise. I mean, I knew, by his behavior, that Yon had done SOMETHING, but I didn't think he had caused the attack. But, wait, who's Shi and San? They ARE different people, right? o.O
Hahahaha, the scene where Sasuke and Naruto were crows, and Naruto was really clumsy was so funny. It was amazing. But, also, it was kinda bittersweet. I mean, you know, the part with Sasuke and his eyesight. I'm starting to feel kind of sad for him... Well, not starting, but feeling sorry for him all over again. -sigh-
Your writing style is amazing! I'm so jealous. . Hahahaha. But, no, seriously, it is. It has humor, creepiness, and saddness all packed up into ONE scene. I can't do that. You're an inspiration.
Wellz, update soon! I'm looking forward to your next chapter!
Another wonderful chapter! Love your ideas of the chakra threads woven into wristbands as communication devices and also Naruto learning to fly and become a crow. His conversations with Sasuke in the one were fun and reminiscent of when they were young.
I'm starting to wonder...it makes me think that perhaps the thing that they are dealing with is less external and more internal. But none the less there were quite a number of interesting plot twists.
It just makes me wonder, how are they going to unravel this.
The plot thickens (even more hehe) So looking forward to my (and Hito's) 'laundry list' of questions answered XD. Also agree with Hito ("That's really harsh, Mom.”) about his mother's responses to his question about her prior feelings towards his father. Felt like smacking her for her insensitivity - not only the past to Naruto but even more importantly to her son.
I love your story! It's humor draws you in at the beginning, and then it gets creepier and more confusing as the story goes on, making you have to read it.
I don't usually like it when people make up the main characters, but Hito and his brothers/sister just fit into the story so well! I'm really curious to see how this story ends... So update quickly!
Some major twists and truns, and hints at more serious things. I have my own suspicions about what Naruto told Sakura, doubly so considering it was not about their son's discipline.
The telling of a story, within a story within a story is also very cleverly done. Three intermingled stories all being told together to form a single tale.
I'm glad you are continuing, as I truely do enjoy reading this.
Some interesting and unexpected events, looks like Konohamaru is in trouble and it seems that Hito is having difficulties of his own. I have my own suspicions about the source of that voice and what it means, but not doubt we will have to wait and see to find out.
I look forwards to seeing how things play out, and finding out what happened with the cake.
As you know much love this story so far. The original characters are interesting and well crafted - my favorite is Hito XD. I love especially the interactions between Naruto and Hito, its wonderful to see him as a father (and as Hokage). Can't wait until the next chapter(s). I have so many questions needing answers! LOL Belle
So, Naruto and Sasuke are teaching Naruto's sons some lessons...much needed ones it seems at the moment. While someone else is targeting his family. The fact that Gaara recognised it is worrying, although it introduces interesting possibilities about who it was.
Quite a few surprises, I have to wonder at the identity of his attacker and what effects that will have but more importantly what the hell it was that he summoned to attack them.
I think that event may have finally taught Hito to stop goofing off, like his father before him a serious event has reminded him of how important this is, and that sometimes you need to be serious.
The fact he didn;t believe Naruto was spot on, worked quite well in contrast to the more serious posture he had a moment before. That and Sasuke watching the whole thing, as well as Naruto's comments made the whole thing priceless.
I look forwards to seeing what Sasuke does now, and the identity of this new ofe.
Some very clever twists and turns this time. A lot of intgeresting developments and revelations. Still, the question is just what attacked them, and why.
Good luck & best wishes,
Hououza
Haku again 11/25/07 . chapter 7
thx:)
course it's not clearer now because now i wonder 'what happened to kushima next?' and so on.
but i'm not going to ask for more.otherwise my poor brain wouldn't take it.speaking of which,i'm probably dumber than naruto* as i'm at a complete loss with the old man.[**he's someone who's been redeemed so any of the good characters step out of question.he has sharingan,i think.if he weren't old i'd say he acts like sasuke would,had he been brought back.itachi couldn't be that old either,nor that close to naruto.then...?.TOBI:P]
*we know he's not
**thinking process and the reason my brain is already fried.please ignore
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