you captured Shizuru's feelings from the manga very well, it is really sad that Natsuki will keep overlooking Shizuru, : and Shizuru keeps suffering in silence.

When i first read the manga i think i died a little thanks to it *shakes head*

Any how, this is very well written 8D

The stupid manga sucks...uck...TatexNatsuki *barf* i hate tate and i hate takeda...but this is one of the best angst i have ever read! you really captured shizuru's feelings...i think...

i can not tell u how much i absolutely hated that freakin manga. seriously tate x natsuki!

u really captured shizuru's feelings and how she felt for natsuki in the manga. u really made me cry.

i seriously hated manga natsuki for being so straight and of course i hate tate for taking natsuki and having his own freakin harem.

i want to kill both tate and sunrise for that messed up manga... oh and i liked u'r other story 'fray in the dark' the one that acually has shiznat...

ew

Tate and Natsuki?

*barfs*

yeah...odd relationship in the manga...That was one of the best angsty stories...*tears in my eyes* ... and a broken heart, 'cause i remembered manga Shizuru the sad and lonely kaichou...

Arigatto gozaimasu! T_T

I don't really know what to say about this... All in all, I've only read the first couple of books, but I seem to have gotten that same feeling that you had. And... I think you captured it best. Shizuru wasn't ever going to be enough, even if she desperately wanted to be, and Natsuki would continue to overlook her like she had since they had met. It's a vicious cycle, you know, and a painful one at that. You could feel that inside Shizuru, and I understood her thoughts and pain much more than I got to in the manga.

Nonetheless, I know exactly how Shizuru is feeling, so I guess that's why I take a particular interest in this story.

In other words, since all I seem to be doing right now is putting fancy words to what I really want to say. I really enjoyed this story. And I wouldn't change it for the world. It would be different and, to me, that's a very bad thing. Thanks for the chance to read this.

Wow, that was awesome, dude. Really awesome. The one word that kept running through my head was "sneaky". xD Jush right more soon!

I don't know whether I want to punch you or hug you, lol.

Very well written! But poor, poor Shizuru!

I'm crying inside. Made my insides turn!

Awesome job!

I LOVE the angst, Wolf-san.

Angst completely rocks.

Because without Angst...these no make-up smex.

and make-up smex is HAWT.

LOLOLOL.

jk. jk. I want to kill Tate still. and Takeda. Both of them. (Gets Chainsaw)

So early/late? Seems you share my bad habits. Hm...listen to music very loudly and enjoy the feelings radiating from your neighbors. If all else fails, write more. -grins- Much more.

Ahh, manga-verse. Much loved manga-verse. That is, loved in fanfiction. The actual manga I want to tear apart because I can't stop reading it. (oxymoron-ish?) But their relationship in the manga is something that interests me, and you captured it so perfectly, so painfully, and there's that feeling in one's chest that hurts and makes one want to cry because it's so good but so- um. I still need sleep. That was good (that word again...) tbough. Very. And if you wrote a chapter-fic I might just throw a party, since all the manga-verse really has fanfic-wise is Delirium. (would it have a happy ending? I admit to being a romantic idiot at times)

Naolin

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::vomits a little in mouth::

I hate the Manga so much ... I remember the day I picked up the first volume in the store. Read it. Then destroyed it.

Tate's a loser ... with all the HIME after him. EW!

Very well written ... btw ... really showed Shizuru's POV in the manga ... that awful awful manga

Time to Maki Maki Tate's ass.

yes you can say that the manga was rather strange or more like WTF.They shouldn't have done that but it can't be helped now. I wish Natsuki had seen how muich shizuru cared.

The way I see it, you've captured their relationship in the manga per-fect-ly! And, hell yeah, it's heart-wrenching.

But, PLEASE, if you're going to to another mangaverse fic or a sequel of this one or something...PLEASE make'em stay together in the end! *sniff sniff*

Wow i really like how your portraied this relationship between the two in the manga. Good fanfic.

I hate that stupid manga.

Argh if they didn't put shizuru and natsuki hug in, I swear, I definitely burn it.