Shows you how far behind I am that I am only now commenting on this...

But heck. We all started out as Modest Fen. I used to send stories to Analog when I was in high school. They were kind to me...

... Damn, seriously? Well, no need for me to visit this site anymore, haha. Ah, I hate it when my favorite story gets ended without an actual ending. In fact, I do believe this was the first fanfic I ever read, now that I think about... Guess it'll go to the bin of rereads now, I have far too many in that catogory.

Anyway, good luck on the rest of your stuff.

Nice idea and please update soon as I liked your take on Snape.

the confrontation between my sweet neville and my brave snape was very realistic! Neville's no longer scared of snape, of course. And it's so like hermione to feel guilty of snape's death. But really, she shouldn't. It's not her fault. Snape was gonna die anyways. but good job!

very good. Snape's speech about slytherin house was spot-on! He's so right. I do think that slytherin can be a bit of every house...but everyone views them as these little sneaky cheaters! Even though they don't have to be. I believe that every hogwarts house has both good and bad traits, it's just that everyone associates the word evil with slytherin...how unfortunate. But snape is taking everything well. He's very good to the little first years. Sighs, i wanna be in his house!

aw, the confrontation between harry and snape was well-written. The point that you made of slytherin-bashing after the war, was something i never thought of. But yeah, it would make total sense for that to happen. After all it's voldy's house, lol.

omg! neville + luna 4 evaah! I don't give a damn about what jk rowling has to say about it. I don't want neville to marry hannah abbot! that's a load of bull. He should so marry luna!

very good. I feel so bad for luna! My only criticism is that, sometimes it feels like a romance rather than a little heart-to-heart like father/daughter...
not all the time, just a couple times. that's okay though, it can be tough to make it sound like that. Especially after the whole 'solid' thing after luna kissed his cheek.

oh merlin! this is good. The confrontation with draco and snape was written very well. And lucius's reaction...spot on! One thing that bothered me, is that i feel bad that they're bankrupt...well i don't feel bad, more ashamed for them really. They went to wealthy rich aristrocrats to poorer than the weasleys'!!

very good. The confrontation with snape and luna was very interesting. .Sorry...but if i didn't know better i would think that you were trying to ship them!! But by the end of it, i realized that snape was like a father-figure for luna now that she has lost her daddy. And I'm glad you established that. Cause if you were a snape/luna shipper, i'd probably flame you, lol!

so good! It really puts snape into perspective. And i like the part about the drink...perhaps being a ghost isn't so bleak.

omg, i totally forgot! just cause snape's a ghost doesn't mean he can't teach. That would be so cool if he remained a teacher!

oh my god, this is written beautifully. You have really good word choice. And i like how you wrote snape's character around lily...He loved her so much! And I feel so bad for him. Of course, I could never see severus coming back as a ghost...but hey this is fanfiction, right? Good so far.
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Again your updates help develop Severus's character and add much to the story. I love your figurative language, it really helps paint a picture of the scene for the reader and conveys the turbulent emotions that Snape is feeling.

I like all of the things you put in. I especially like Eve being there. It gives the chapter more sustenance and more room for character explanation. And I loved the sarcastic comment at the end. I liked the first version of this chapter but the updated one is way better. Good job!