 kishi.tenshi 2007-08-15 . chapter 1some corrections:
effected - affected
aloud - allowed
atempt - attempt
uzimaki - Uzumaki
colleages - colleagues
mentiion - mention
blaiming - blaming
--probably, it would be better if you put quotation marks on some of the conversations of the caharacters
well that's it, though I know that these mispelled words are intentional. Hope you're not offended.
FYI - I also recieve this kinds of reviews, and I take it seriously by doing my best on writing the next chapter.
--again, please don't be offended,a nd I hope you'll get well soon! |