Um..this may not make sense, but I like the story but Hate the song you put with it. Sorry.

I liked it! Though I haven't heard that Hannah Montana Song yet, it sounds nice. And AW! They got married! A happy ending. But who's Al going to stay with when they go on their HoneyMoon?? 0.o

Hey! ^^

At first: I don't really have a fancy for that kind of music. Therefore it may be unfair, if I jugde this songfiction, but on the other hand it's even more unfair to not say anything, right?

Anyway, it's quite a romantic fanfiction. I think it's a little bit onesided for presenting all of the positive emotions Winry had, but none of the negative. Of course you mention her "suffering", but do not elaborate enough to make the reader sympathize. But, hell, that's probably just me not liking so very romantic stuff ^^'

It seems as if Ed was asking Winry to marry him right after confessing his love. It seems a little quick, that's probably all. They did not once fight, did not live together, it seems as if they barely spoke after that, cause you don't mention it. Therefore, even though they know each other since earliest childhood, the decision comes rushed and naive to the reader.

Also I was surprised to not have Ed wavering or blushing even once. Ed would be afraid of being rejected and probably would be more touchy and hesistant about his feelings. Though you mentioned that Winry had to wait for his confession for a long time, you do not elaborate. It seems also a little OOC, you know?

And though I like the thought of Winry and Ed being in love with each other, their relationship contains much more than only this fluffy, pink, naive love you describe. I'd have liked it to read more about their relationship's many layers, like the grieves they experienced, how their relationship changed from friendship and then a childhood crush to more, how Winry felt desperate about the other relationships you mentioned she had (it seems she doesn't even take those seariously, and that's not Winry's style! Not without an explanation at least.) or how much she needed to rely on someone to stay at her side after the sudden and hurtful loss of her parents years ago.

However, even though I think you could do better than that, I have to remember that you wrote this quite quickly and on inspiration. Good work is created by working something you wrote quickly over and over, I think. Inspiration alone makes a work seldomly perfect, though I believe it to be the best start for any tale someone writes.

I hope I didn't offend you too much. I really do like some of the other work you do, you know that. :)

Hope to be reading something by you soon again! :)