Wow. Seriously freaky. At first I thought it was Raph, but then you mentioned 'Red'. Extremely interesting insights in this story, liked it alot!

Br, Rene, this is shivery-good! Not least of all because, even in his madness, your Leonardo is still so terribly in-character. As is everyone else; I especially like the glimpse we get (through Leo's eyes) of Donatello. Still such a fixer, even in a situation like this one.

Definitely dark, but a pleasure to read nonetheless! :)

~Skybright

I do love it when you go all dark and creepy on us. This was chilling. The word 'perfect' in the title and the narrator berating himself for 'failing' tipped me off pretty early on that this was Leo, but that didn't lessen the tension or the sense that the insane, hate-filled captive was truly someone to be feared. Because it was written so effectively,the tension and fear were enhanced with knowing it was Leo. Well done!

Wow! Great story so far. I knew it was Leo when I read further down, but at first I thought it was a Foot Ninja. Great job on this. I feel so sorry for Leo. Update soon. You are an awesome writer.

The Bubbly One,
Shell

Yes its me again. Still Holy crap, I haven't stopped thinking about this fic since I read it. I CAN'T GET IT OUT OF MY MIND. I need some closure. Do you think you could continue this. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!

I actually read this a couple of days ago and was too lazy to leave a review - but here it is!

I really liked it. A nice testement to how Leo may go too far one day and how his brothers may restrain him. It was that part that I found quite heartbreaking - that they would have to do so. And what he said to Mike, about killing him first and thinking he was doing him a favour.

To keep in context with the other reviews, I realised it would be one of the turtles about a third of the way through and knew which one it was only after he had mentioned the others. But that did not detract in the slightest! Actually added to the fascination... how did things go so terribly wrong?

Great tale Rein. Hope you keep showing us how it should be done!

This was absolutely amazing. You're writing always is, but I loved this. It gave me creepy-chills of the highest caliber. I started getting an inkling about who it was the further I read, when I noticed Leo's absence among the narrator's mentions of the turtles, and as that little nagging feeling started in the back of my head. And honestly, I could see Leo snapping like this, finally breaking and shattering from all the pressure put on him and from Splinter's and his own expectations of perfection. I mean, after all, we all saw a foreshadowing of this after "Exodus", didn't we? Leo started...well, not turning on the others, but bearing down on them, chastising them for not having the same drive and focus as he did. He even took his anger out on Splinter, going so far as to attack him and draw blood. This was very well-written and believable, and I loved it. Your summary is absolutely spot-on perfect, by the way; I can honestly say that I could think of few people who would be more dangerous and scary-as-hell than a Leo that has lost his mind and inhibitions. Honestly, this was excellent, and thanks for another great read; I really hope I can write at the level that you do someday. :) Take care, and thanks again!

Wow. That was some one-shot. I thought it was Leo from the beginning, though I wasn't positive of course. The obsession with detail and the observations, the careful planning and the preparation all screamed Leonardo to me. His thought process is definitely one of a mind that's snapped. Awesome job.

I blame Splinter. He put way too much pressure on him.

Wow, what an amazing story!! I really enjoyed all the description and it was very gripping, especially being written from Leo's perspective. Ow, poor Raph. :(

I hope you do continue, I'd really like to know what pushed Leo over the edge into this state and how it's going to plan out! Pls do! :)

DW.

Cold, creepy, cruel. I love the narrator's voice, especially given the context of who he turns out to be. And absolutely heart-breaking to think of the prisoner's captors in context.

Since others folks have mentioned it, I guessed about a third of the way in that the prisoner was family. About halfway in, I knew exactly who.

Perfection can, indeed, have a terrible price.

Very well done. I only had to read, like, one-third of it to figure out it was Leo, but I supposed that's because I sort of spoiled it for myself by skimming the other reviews. Anyway, I don't see Leo ever snapping, but hey, its a fanfic, and anything can happen, so you did a wonderfull job of making Leo go bonkers. I like it as a one-shot, but if you do choose to expand it, I'll be happy to read. =]


BYE!

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Oh my goodness... wow this simply amazing and very beautifully written at the same time.


At first I was all like this must be about Karai, but then as I read it further, I began to notice that Leo wasn't among Don, their master or the other two turtles.


This story should be written longer, if your plotbunny allows for it to show how our dear Leonardo had finally snapped. So please update it if you can and don't leave it as a one-shot. I should also that I love reading your stuff, especially the POTC/TMNT crossover story!


So excellent job and update soon, Rene!

Well the price of perfection will take its toll - for no one can be perfect all the time.

But my what you have changed and turned the perfect one into is amazing to say the least, that he would go so far to think such thoughts and...wow, my how the mighty has fallen.

Lord, I went through about a third of the shot thinking it was Karai before realizing Leo was absent and went "Oh dear God, that's LEO." Sheesh, and now you're making thoughts of how this would go on spring up like weeds in my mind! (shudders) Yes folks, Leo has left his marbles at the door.

If you have an update for this, or if ya leave it a one-shot that's fine, but holy hand grenades that was different. Great job, Rene'. Top-notch.

LN