great writing very discriptive :)

I'm not flaming the pairing (I think it's really cute, actually!) but why not Amane? Could you do another chapter on L and Amane?

Yeah, I know it's a one-shot and all... but please?

-crying gently- It was beautiful.

that was awesome. Kind of sad at the same time. but still good.

This was fantastic.
It's very sorrowful, but that's what makes it so true. Personally, after reading LABBMC, I believe that L really did feel that way for Naomi.
I also think that writing it from Wammy's point of veiw was an excellent element as well.
As far as grammatical error goes; I only saw one or two little things in there. Other than that, I couldn't tell that English isn't your first language! Well done.

Wow, that was amazing you could really feel the emotion it it, real powerful. Wammy is the best, he's so kind and understanding and this story really show'd the best in him.

this story was incredible

Oh, wow. That was, touching? deep? It was...really good :D And so sad ;~; Poor L! I wanna cry now! ;~; -wah-

To put it simply, I loved it. Beautifully written, fantastic description, great concept. Great work!

Shadeslayer

AW! This was so cute, yet so sad at the same time. I really love the Naomi/L pairing, they're really cute together! You did such a good job!

wow that was an amazing naomixL story I must say.

wow, I'm so freakin happy that I'm not the only one who imagined the irene/holmes l/naomi parallel :D wonderful!

aww..sweet
i love this pairing for some odd reason
but i like it

amazing! so sweet^^ I just love how you pictured the characters! I'd like to read more L/Naomi, would you kindly give me the link to the community?

I liked your story. It was so cute, yet very sad...

It's neat that you used Watari's perspective instead of L's. And I didn't notice any read errors in grammar or any of that. :)