Wow - this is a great story, and the plot is ace! I can't wait to read the next chapters. However, I'm slightly confused with the end of this chapter - I can understand why the Dr is scared of loosing Rose, but Jack is immortal, and although the Dr was being kind, surely he knows it's very unlikely Jack will be killed perminanty. Cool story though :) x !

Brilliant! I love it when Jack is joined with the Doctor and Rose, so funny and better usually

Please carry on

Love it need i say more.

love it, love where you are going with it.

so sweet. a great start!

Great story! i like how the Racnoss are there and how Torchwood srewed up again but jack's team is good. i like how the Tardis and the Doctor accepted Jack and him and the Torchwood team are going with him!

I'm off to read the sequel! That lovely sequel you wrote! Meep! ... I need to stop watching the Wizard of Oz...

Hang on a minute. Why is Jack so afraid of getting killed by the Tardis because he's immortal when he's immortal? The Tardis can't kill him. And it's the reason the Tardis might want to kill him. It's kinda ironic.

Sorry, was I babbling? Oh, looking back on it, I don't think I could understand a single word I wrote.

'What the Hell you doin’ carryin’ my bleedin’ hand around in a rucksack'

*dies laughing*

Oh, I should put that on a t-shirt... a novelty one...then post it to the Doctor... I wonder how Rose would react?

Wait a minute. Jack's gay?

An excellent story-I enjoyed it! And it was nice to see Jack again.

10 out of 10 stars.

I really like this story! I'm ecstatic that Jack's in it because he is my favorite. :D

I have one minor suggestion though: During the large paragraphs when people are speaking, especially the Doctor's long speech, you might want to consider breaking it up into a few paragraphs or lines, because when it's just a huge wll of text, it's a little hard to read. Everything else is awesome though!

I LOVE this story! It was wonderful how you made the Racnoss have a change of heart, and have the Doctor feel sorry for her. I can't wait to see how they take down Torchwood!

Encore ! Cheers D

Sequel. NOW. *twitch* Rather good fic, can't wait for the next part. keep writing!