Time flies quickly, sagewolf - it's now been more than a year since I last looked at this. In any case... here goes the cheese!

This chapter's pros:
- That was a wee bit of a cool conversation at the beginning of the chapter. So basically we have a female tactician stuck between two opposite poles of knights at the very beginning of the chapter, and that was just the right comic relief.
- Your theory about Glass' name was great! However, judging from the fact that a nomad girl with not much real battle experience and a pair of bumbling knights at the same state of experience lack (lv. 3 Lord, lv. 1 cavaliers, both of them, as I often come to this stage) pwned him rather easily led me to think that the theory around the name was a little bit of an overstatement.
- I like the pacifism. Looks like the bandits' casualties did not include too many err... needless deaths?
- Wait a second, this time you bent the plot! And... it works well too, so the scenario changed almost totally. This means you can as much as shave the entire siege-at-the-old-fortress off because now Dorcas is in!

Cons, after all...
- Last year (Yeah, and I do mean, last YEAR) I said something like, it would be better if your plot deviates from the mean storyline, and you did it fairly well, except for a couple of things.
+ First off, Dorcas wouldn't be persuaded that easily. He has a wife who couldn't walk, and he was willing to KILL for her. The reason in the game why he submitted was not because he saw the right from the wrong, but because he realized that it the battle was to continue either he or those he was working with would end up axing his wife.
+ Second, as far as I know, the Bernese, even those living near the border, are quite fiercely loyal to their sovereign. Just look at how Murdock mobilized hundreds of Wyverns in the "bloodiest day in the history of Elibe" - as coined in Fuuin no Tsurugi. I don't think that their kings (both father and son) neglected them like you described.
- If anything, I could see that you flanderized Sain a little too much. He could be a jerk, but taking as far as you described him was not... you see what I mean. Sain is a jerk, but he CAN think well. "Florina! You must stay aground! If you take to the air, the ballista will target you in an instant" - yes, he said it.

So far, I will not be able to review your next chapters any time - as I said, other commitments calls. If you have got a 100K forum contest on your heels, you'd see what I mean. But regardless, write on!

Hey there, Sagewolf! Gunlord from the lil' circle of reviewyness here at your request ^^

After giving this thread a quick looksie, I can honestly say there's little for me to criticize in the way of grammar or spelling. I couldn't find any errors! Maybe I wasn't looking hard enough, but as far as I can tell, you deserve kudos for your dilligence :D

I do have plenty of praise, though. This is *very* well written! One of the better pieces up on . The battle scene was very well done, Lyn seems solidly in character, and the way you write Dev seems very endearing to me, though as a word of caution, be careful about turning her into a Mary Sue--that happens a lot in tactician fics ;_; Anyways, though, I can say I really liked this fic, and in fact, I can't think of a piece I've had as much fun reading since Shadows Under the Oak Tree. Very good work! Thanks for pointing us to it in the Lil' Circle of Reviewyness! :D

This was a pretty enjoyable read. Everyone seems in character and the banter is believable from what we see of them in the game. I.e. Lyn and Kent are determined, Sain and Matthew are amusing yet serious when they need to be and Dorcas is dull. Having a solid plot to at least loosely follow can only help structure as well.
I can't really criticise any particular aspect, which is good, expect for perhaps that Dev is quite close to being Mary Sueish, what with the brilliant perception and lack of any real character flaws (except maybe cynicism, ha.) There's also the fact that if whatever terrible event happened in her past occured 8 years ago, it would make her Illia's greatest up-and-coming tactician in her mid teens. But I suppose this can be let slide when considering half the rest of the cast are about that age.
Anyway, this doesn't matter if the character is still written well, which she is, so it's not a dissappointment or anything. I look forward to the next installment.

Another AMAZING chapter :) And yay! Rath - and, and even bigger yay! MATHEW!"Your side looks like more fun than his."- I do love Mathew; sneaky,sneaky(can you tell he's one of my fav characters?XD)
Fiara- i like that name, its a nice name
"As would I, Sain. And not because she's wearing a skirt, either."- lol, i love interactions between kent and sain. and sain pov is amazing, too; he's so wierd XD
cant wait for the next one!^_^

Wow, that really was quick! this completely made my day (first day of band, gr...)I especially loved the lines: 'No, they've redesigned the Ostian town square while you were away. Do you like it?' and '"Care for some intelligent conversation?"'. Keep up the good work!!^_^

Hee!! These chapters were funny!! And I like how you add in a little of your own dialogue and actions. YAY Serra and Erk... And Dorcas, too! And Wil and Florina! Anyways, good job!

Yay! A new chapter! Wo! i loved the part about kent being a 'big red knight'. its great that you add in some humor; it keeps the story more interesting. there were so many great moments in this, like the chess and sain's 'storytelling'. i'm looking forward to your next chapter of this! ^_^

I'm making good on my promise to review more of the stories in the circle. I had yet to read this one, and usually, I'm very cynical about stories that center around tacticians, as it seems this will do. And let tell you, I like Dev. I like how in the beginning she was heading "south-west-ish...she hoped", and how her dialogue/ thoughts sound so natural and refreshing. Only thing I will really remark on is to cut down on the ellipses, and never, ever start a sentence with one. Other than that it was good. :)
~Lemurian-Girl~

Hey, that was yet another effort on novelizing FE 7!

Well, what can I say... great work you've been doing. At least, you did not have the burden of repeating what the characters said in-story word-by-word, meaning the story is (or more accurately, will be) having a new perspective.

I am writing another FE 7 novelization myself (But hey, please don't sue me, my idea is a lot wackier than yours, and most importantly, my tactician is a GUY named Uther (Spoiler warning! If you'd played Warcraft I...)) but I think I am not doing as well as you are, especially in denoting the emotions of the FE crews.

But actually, if you had chosen to be creative, I hope you can do sth better in the next chapters, like altering the road taken by the character a bits, add some gaiden chapters (I don't mean in-game gaidens, I mean in-novel side stories!) It would make it much, much better to read than follow the rigid path set up by the game itself.

Keep up a good work, and (heh heh, shame on me) take a look at mine as well :D:D:D:D

Cripe? No, no. It's "Bloodegazzards! The Scourge of Santiago has arrived! Conceal your poultry and defend your underaged daughters!" Actual quote from one of my friends. I swear.

This was great, too. I really can't find much *wrong*, so I'll tell you what's *right*. Firstly, you're making the time relationships believable. Instead of "oh, look, we're here", you've put some effort into it. Congrats.

Your fight scene was teriffic, too. I keep wondering why no one ever *explains* the Swords->Axes->Lances thing, but you're one of the first I've ever seen do it. Frankly, you took the words right out of my mouth on this one. That said, GET OUT OF MY HEAD! I know it's spacious in there, but geez, I NEED it.

You altered the dialogue. This is good, because if I wanted to see the dialogue as it was in the game, I'd go *play* the game. And your way is much better for intra-character relationships. You've also got Sain down to an art, so you've got brownie points in my book.

There wasn't anything *wrong*. You're not actually giving the MS any unbelievable skills, though her past is getting a bit stretched. Still, it's not for me to decide. After all, Aramin is doing *what* again?

You're going to get tired of me saying this after a while: Great job! Keep it up!

Yay for you! This is the best novelisation (spelled incorrectly, I know, I'm lazy) I've seen of Fire Emblem! PLEASE update more and lots of it!

hey, im actually reviewing this through the right story this time, yay!!another good chapter, and im sorry, but i just have to corect something in the A/N.(yes i actually read them, unlike some people)i saw it and i just cracked up, but-and i know its kinda hard to tell from my name-im not a he.yes, thats right,im a girl.anyway, i am kinda glad that Pent's not gonna be OOC(cause hes one of my favorite characters)and the Serra/Erk pairing just makes me twitch.but anyway, keep up the good work, and i hope you put the next chapter out soon!^_^

" - Has all of the FE7 supports in text underneath the FAQS section.

And now, your review: Pretty well written, the reviewer bellow me had some good points too. Although the whole "Mary-Sue" thing can't be applied in the same way to characters that have a major place in directing the actions of others through out a story. After all, if the tactician...well...just plain sucks, or is distracted by other human aspects, the three lords wouldn't be getting anywhere fast.

I can only hope of course you'll update.

And this novelization will be completed eventually.

Nice. Not overly Mary Sue-ish, though with the "I'm wanted in forty states and unwanted in the rest" schtick, you're getting close to it...

You wrote this very well. It was descriptive, well-thought-out, and kinda neat on the combat end, too. If you can keep confrontations detailed like that you'll have my blessing to marry my daughter...if you swing like taht...and when I get a daughter...

Now, for me, Erk takes precedence over everyone else. Matthew is a close second, tied with Sain. You're getting all these anyway, so I'm not worried about it. However, I would like to see more of Ephidel! People tend to leave him out. Remember, Ephidel was considered the "Mastermind" by the MCs for quite a while. He needs his own section, and an important role in the story until he gets eaten by a giant lizard...

Well, WELL done! I'm very impressed. You've made my alert list.