Interesting storyline and I enjoy reading it. However, I don't think it would be as simple as you are making it.

How would they fly between? In the Dragonrider series, a rider must clearly picture in his mind where he wants to go or else chance losing himself and his dragon between. It would be difficult if not impossible for a blind dragonrider, especially during threadfall where seconds count.

Wow, you really understand the world of Pern, I really enjoyed reading this chapter. And onwards!

I hope you didn't give up on this story.It's good,but I do agree with the other reviewers.Keep on updating(:

please go on go on go on!
This is pretty much one of the better fanfics I've read so far about Pern.
Ihope you did not grow tired with this story, because you haven't updated for more than half a year...
Very sad, but please continue.
greetings from germany

Perhaps put a bit more depth to the confusion she's feeling, and you might have elaborated a bit on it as she was gathering her things to bring away with her, as it almost feels as if she's going right from the choosing to the flying; but you have the feel of Pern down well from what I remember. (It's been a few years since I read them, actually. And the last few years with my own Fanfic writing I've not read as much as I used to do.)

You did do k n a p instead of n a p, and a couple of lower case letters where you meant upper case, but it's well done--much better done than many I've read on here.

Aha! Finally found you!

So far so good, although you have one h e a r where you want h e r e. In this sentence: So, Meera wondered, what were dragons doing hear, now! And it might better end in a question mark than an exclamation point.

I'm interested in seeing where this goes on, and am marking it to send notices as you post.

My ISP has been up and down and up and down so frequently lately I've been feeling like a yoyo, and we're into review phase for the MEFAs, so am doing a good deal of reading and reviewing at the moment, hoping to do much better than I did last year when I was unable to even get on the MEFA site for months.

First off, this is a wonderful, unique idea! However, as several other reviewers have noted, everything happens too quickly and easily. I agree that Meera would not be accepted that readily as a candidate due to her handicap. I don't have anything against the possibility of her becoming a dragonrider because of this, but she will need to struggle to prove herself worthy and capabable, much more so than others who aren't disabled. That, in itself, could take several chapters and would be interesting to read!

This story has the potential to be much longer than it is. Fill in the details! I also agree that we need to know more about Meera besides the fact that she's blind, works in the kitchens at Harper Hall, and had burned her hands. How did she fall into that occupation? Who were her family members? Does she visit them regularly? What is her relationship like to the others at Harper Hall? (We do meet one friend, Seria, briefly.)

This could be a really great story, if you flesh it out more. As it stands, it reads more like a summary. I'm looking forward to seeing what you do with this!

interesting beginning so far, but the plot moves too quickly. you should slow it down to develop your characters more and go deeper into their relationships. we don't know much about meera, just that she's blind and that she's burned her hands, but what about her personality or family history? she seems to be very fortunate, her childhood dream of becoming a dragonrider coming true. i do agree with other reviewers about the way the weyr authorities don't seem to make any comment about the fact that she is blind. but the reader needs an element of empathy or sympathy with the main character. she has to struggle sometime. well, i guess i should finish the story, but focus on slowing down the plot and adding more characterization to make your story stronger.

Basically, your writing is quite strong but I echo the sentiments of some of the other reviewers re. the plausability of a blind dragonrider being allowed... Or at least a blind girl being allowed to stand as candidate. I'd also reckon that you're rushing the story a bit. Generally in fanfic it's the indulgence in the details that makes for good reading and I've recently read some really stunning Impression scenes where even tho' the protagonist still went ahead to Impress the gold, the writer cast many doubts in the path of the character's success.

Don't rush. Show us details. Don't tell us that things are happening. Make us feel what's going on. How do things smell? Is it warm? And here, especially for a blind person importance could be placed on textures.

That was an ok chapter. Great job. Can't wait for more.

A few technical slips - your punctuation around the dialogue is broken in one spot. Capitalisation too: Weyrlingmaster needs to be capitalised, but "Idea" doesn't.

Oh, and "nap", not "knap". Knap means several things, but sleep is NOT one of them.

Unlike the previous chapters, this one is really pretty bare and disappointing - things happen, yes, but there isn't much in the way of plot or character development at all. The preceding chapters were much richer than this one.

Aw Aylith is so sweet. :)
I like Alya, too, she seems like a good friend.
More soon!

well! by my eyebrows, this story has enormous potential!! the plotline is new, is interesting!

but- oh, but! a blind main character should have a blind persons perspective. through using other methods to describing Meera's surrounds and perception you have the readers whole attention, making them imagine in sounds, smells, and touch! Meera has been blind since birth, so she doesn't know colours. what would she image them to be? is gold, like a queen dragon, sunshine on her face? is black is cold, crying? are blue dragons "coloured" like a fresh breeze, from the sky which everyone says is blue?

she is blind. she might feel excluded in a world of people who can see, who can walk in a new place and not bump into things. have other characters describe things to her, if you can't have Meera experience it herself.

explore your story! its wonderful! i can't wait to see how it goes.

goodluck, Muff

Your writing is okay, but you really need to reread the books. I read them more than 10 years ago, and even I can tell you're joyously raping canon, as other reviewers have said. So here's a dose of concrit:

You should exploit more the theme of a handicapped queen rider. I think it's a very interesting idea.

You make the Weyr much too accepting of her. "We’ve never had a blind dragon rider before, but no matter." Do you seriously believe they would react like that? As a Pernese, how would YOU react to a blind person becoming your world's equivalent of a firefighter?

This is not a 21st century rich Western society we're talking about. It's Pern, a semi-medieval world fighting for it's survival and relying on the dragon riders for that. From what I remember of the books, I think most of the Pernese population would see a blind dragonrider as a serious hindrance, a danger to herself, to her dragon, and to other dragons. Will she be able to overcome the obstacles? Will she become a useful member of the Weyr? What mistakes will she make?

That's interesting. I still want to see how she will manage to fight thread and go betwene.