Oorah!

Now, why didn't I think of this?! :)

-John

Wow great one-shot!

Remember me? =)

I have never watched this show before, so unfortunately I can't give you any critic on characters and the like...so instead I'll review on the actually writing.
It flowed very smoothly. The abrupt start catches your attention and makes you want to read more. It was short and sweet, smiple and plain, but I liked that. It was just a simple one-shot that didn't have much in it, but told the story well all the same. It got right to the point. Very nice. :3
This atually makes me want to check out this show...I recall that you once suggested it to me. Maybe I'll go on youtube to see what its about.
Once more, good job. =)

A very cool idea! I thoroughly enjoyed the rifleman's creed (it definitely fit with the idea of a Yu Yan archer), and the conservative descriptions you used were definitely befitting. At times, it almost felt as though this was told from the perspective of a robot, which is perfect for this character. Very tough, very macho, very cool. I love single-minded military characters like this, they're fun to write and read because they're a complete mystery to the rest of us.

Cool story!! Where did u get the idea from though? It was pretty random lol.




Your favorite reviewer, :P jjk
Angel-4rom-Heaven

Nice work.