Good work here, mate. Carry on.

Hmph. That kind of arrogance is going to get you killed, Onox.
So, how long is it going to take to get to the temple, any way? And why didn't they just warp?

Wak! It's not finished. Hurry and finish it, pretty please? This is the best retelling of Ocarina of Time I've ever read. Seeing the Ranma characters in these circumstances is fantastic. I was surprised when you changed the Fire sage to Ryoga. I love Akane as a Sheikah. I think you need to make more of Zelda's curse. Maybe a scene where she flies in a storm and falls, or something. Something that captures being a hawk. I'll be watching for the next chapter.

Good show, mate. Spot on.

A good story so far, I just hope you keep at it.

Nice.

Behold! A chapter of character depth and exploration!! Is it not great that the original creator, Shritistrang, wrote the beginning chapters of this most glory filled story. And is it not great that Shritistrang's constitute continued the work and has thus made the latest and most interest chapter!!

Yeah, it was pretty good...though the characters seem to be bleeding together... ...

I think reactions that being used don't entirely correspond with every character. It was even described in the writing itself, "Even though Saria was a nice and gentle girl, she couldn't help but grin smugly..." It wasn't that bad, but it's something to look at.

All in all, it's a great chapter! Short, but great!! Keep writing.

Good show.

Great chapter! I really like how Alex is taking the story!

Though, Alex, I think you need to work on the dialog a little. It was nature, but it didn't have a flow...something makes every word sound right for the situation. I know, I know...it's like pulling teeth, but you don't seem to even try at it.

Two fighters of destiny meet each other in the ring of death, prepared to battle to the bitter end. One the warriors calls to the other:

"I'll fight you! Yeah...YOU! We'll fight...like...some time...probably now... ...YEAH!!"

It's nature because that is how I talk, yeah, but it doesn't communicate the feeling of the moment. You must immerse the reader in the scene. I try to do it but I'm still crappy at it!!

Well, try your best. No one's expecting the world from you. We might be expecting a better time table, though, GOD!! I started a new fic and wrote six chapters of equal length of this one, all in the time it took to post this latest (and mean LATE!) chapter.

I'm just mad because I like this story and I want to see more. So keep writing! Thanks

Well done. Spot on.

Another great chapter, and I loved the final sentence. Very well-written it was, though there were parts in the middle-ish that felt... off a bit. Looking forward to more!

Wow!! Nice job Alex (if I may call you Alex).

It's great to see this fic coming back. I've always liked the blend of Ranma and Zelda, the humor is great in the Zelda-lore and the previous writer place all the Ranma characters perfectly in the Hyrule world. It was very influential when writing my own fic, with all it's the characters with character...right.

My favorite part of this chapter was at the very end, when Akane's feelings and doubts had bogged down her. When she finally overcame the doubt, with help of Link and the others, Akane was affronted with the monstrous "DEAD HAND!!"...a beautiful testament to the Hero's Journey.

In the Hero's Journey (documented by Joseph Campbell), demons and grotesque beasts attack the hero and his/her party through out the quest...or whatever. This is to symbolize a person's struggles with their INTERNAL demons as they live out their life. Akane and the Dead Hand interaction is a perfect example of this, and I loved it! I want to marry it...have five kids with it!! Ok...I'm...getting weird... ...

A problem with this chapter, though, might be in the longer dialog. The dialog in itself is great, but the longer speeches are hard to read. It doesn't flow and it's hard to read.

I have a problem with presenting longer dialog as well. It seems that whatever I do, doesn't help the flow of the words much. So, I try to make the dialog short and sweet, use stronger and overwhelming words to communicate what's being said.

It would nice if you could have someone read the chapter aloud to all who want to view the story, but you have to have the readers read the story. So think about what you're writing and how someone else would read it. Yes, it's very easy to do...except that it isn't at all!! It hardest thing I can do when I'm writing, however it has to be done!

So, Alex or whoever might take up the torch, continue this great story and finish it! I hate half finished stories...SO FINISH! I know where you live... ...

Ah Chapter 37! I'm so glad to see an update one one of my favorite fanfics. I got to say that I absolutely love what you did with this chapter, having Akane face her doubts and fears will definately make a much stronger person for it.

Great new chapter.

So now they need to have another comforntacion with Azusa? well with the way she acts I'm sure is going to be interesting.