 Amara-nii chan 8/16/11 . chapter 36i love can't wait to read more keep up the great work so funny |
 WhiteCrow10 8/12/11 . chapter 27XD And that's what you get when you mess with a woman and her chocolates. |
 Hatake Kai 8/11/11 . chapter 36:) These are cute! I love Royai! Update soon :) |
 Rukia's Reflection 8/10/11 . chapter 36Great chapter! |
 WhiteCrow10 8/10/11 . chapter 12Awww... This was just adorable!
I really like what you have so far and I must admit that I'm a recent fan of this pairing (actually, I recently got into the series itself). There's so much chemistry between the two of them that it might as well be canon, I swear. I like how you've portrayed the characters and I could imagine most of this happening in the FMA universe. I hope to read more in the future! |
 Tigrette-of-Fire 8/9/11 . chapter 36That was eccellent! Havoc's reaction was priceless |
 UniversalBunny 8/9/11 . chapter 36Of course Roy was taken! X thanks fir the update! |
 Rukia's Reflection 8/3/11 . chapter 35Great chapter! Those kind of days suck...but when they end like that, it makes it all go away. ;) |
 UniversalBunny 8/2/11 . chapter 35Pretty interesting! Write mre! F |
 Aurora2361 8/2/11 . chapter 3I love this chapter. So creative with the prompts. I like it! Update soon! |
 Rukia's Reflection 7/29/11 . chapter 34Great chapter! |
 Dailenna 7/28/11 . chapter 35A few corrections to make :P I noticed one of my pet peeves and was going to let it slide, but then I bumped into another one soon after XD Sorry, Fire!
First: when Hawkeye's with the team being evaluated, she says "Adam's, you're first." No need for an apostrophe in the middle of someone's name.
Second: about five lines down from there, Hawkeye again: "You're shots are off a bit to the right" - wrong 'your'.
(I have to say, the story is highly enjoyable apart from those little disruptions, though. There was a use of commas to highlight a word somewhere above (the word 'nearly', although I forget in which context), which I personally wouldn't do - I'd probably use dashes instead - but I remember thinking that I wasn't sure if there was any set sort of punctuation or formatting for that particular use. I'm thinking maybe italicising, now, but I forget the context, so . . :/
Later, "you're uniform jacket is dry" - same again, wrong 'your'.
"And you were the one too fall asleep first, Colonel." - to
Such a cute story :) And she made it the whole way without someone seeing her tattoo. Or at least seeing it and paying attention to it - Feury may have caught a glimpse, but it certainly wasn't what caught his attention at the time! Yey :3 Lovely fluffiness. |
 Bizzy 7/27/11 . chapter 35I love this. I love this so much. It's the details that make this piece, and I am soo glad I waited until now to read the end. I kind of love that Fuery shows up and is like "CRAP FLEE".
Just..love. So much love. |
 Bizzy 7/23/11 . chapter 34I really love this.
As in, I have nothing constructive to say other than "I love this." |
 Cristipotter 7/22/11 . chapter 34I'm so glad this was updated! That was a beautiful chapter, and a very plausible story for these two. I loved Hawkeye's last line because it gives hope to the whole Royai relationship. The whole thing was very, very enjoyable :)
Hope to see more soon! |