hey, it's me, greywings2! i LOVE THIS STORY, and i can't wait for the next chapter!!1 i love it, Rouge as a boy, priceless, YAOI!

um ya. Detached. I have advice though! Do not despair! Add what people are feeling and describe the scenery more. Add your own stuff too! Not just what happend in the movie. Because it works for the movie, but when a story has that little happening it just starts to sound flat.

CHANGE THE PAIRING! CHANGE CHANGE CHANGE!

Again, still detached.

Enjoyed it alot though!

1. Try making your summery more clear. I only ran into this story because I enjoyed one of your Loveless fanfics, and wanted to see if you had written any more. I saw while browsing an X-men fanfic, and since I'm a huge fan of X-men I decided to look.

2. Very nice writing, with good some good flow.

3. The writing did seem detached from the situation though. Expecially the first part.

4. lol, airhead me didn't get that Rouge was Mark for a really loung time... oopsie. Plus the "he he he he his his he his he" thing get's confusing. More names.

5. AND! SPELLING!

6. Really enjoyed it!

Very awesome...You did refer to Mark/Rogue as a woman in this chapter though, easy mistake though seeing how Rogue is actually a woman in the movies. I can't wait to read more!

oh my god that was interesting to say the very least maybe you should continue it lmao