...I. DO. NOT. LIKE. SASUITA. ITS INCEST...HOWEVER I MUST SAY ITS WELL WRITTEN THATS WHY I POSTED THE REVIEW THE WRITING STYLE.

I love this fic...along with the title.Heartless,that's a song by Kanye West too.I love that song...

Oh, I definitely want you to continue!It's awesome.Itachi is so ** hot(sorry *w* ).

Huh, that's strange. The other half of my review for chapter three didn't appear. Wonder why?

Anyway, keep up the good work. Take your time and don't rush. :)

Well that answers most of my questions. So now we know who the chaos demon is, and Deidara is going to help Itachi seal it back to whence it came. The Catholic church was a nice twist, though.

I thought the sex scene was fine, and yes, I understand what you're talking about. Well, that's all right. No one's perfect; you just work to the best of your abilities. Take your time and don't rush. :)

There's something I want to point out. 'Nee-chan' is a form of address to one's sister; 'Nii-chan' is a form of address to one's brother. It's kinda confusing (and shocking, to say the least) to have Sasuke calling Itachi his 'sister'. So, yeah (>->,

ooh an update yay! Why was there a pause , I wonder what will happen! Please update soon thanks!

Plz continue!So far so great!Btw loved the sex scene.I really hope itachi remembers what love is...

Awesome! I hope that Itachi gets his emotions back eventually! Loved the sex scene! Please update soon.

"God Itachi. How are you so good at this?"
"Good question."

That gave me a good chuckle. How does he do it? (winks)

But let's get down to business; so far, this is a good story. The dialog flows smoothly and the transitions from one point of view to the other is neat and simple (like reading a Japanese manga). As I read this, questions went through my mind. What does the Akatsuki plan to do with a demon from hell? Who is this woman with wings? Who are these lackeys that attacked Itachi? Why did he betray Akatsuki and what is the secret between him and Kisame? So many questions, but I'm sure these will be answered in good time.

Now the bad points, the CONS as I call them. While I was reading, I noticed that there wasn't enough emotion in the first chapter. You pulled it off well in chapter two, but I just wasn't feeling it. Yes, I was surprised when Sasuke bluntly says, "We're going to get you to the Konoha hospital and then you'll get better and then I can finally kill you." I LOL'ed when Sasuke b-slapped his brother ("You're leaving me with more questions damn it!"). I felt angry when the Konoha populace celebrated Itachi's brief repose, but in my opinion that was all there was in the chapter. Plus, there were many grammatical errors (misspelled words, missing punctuations, a sentence fragment) that I spotted.

However, this can be fixed. This is what I advise to you:

1. SPELL CHECK. If you have spell check on any writing programs, like Microsoft Works Word Processor, use this to correct those spelling errors when you are revising/proofreading your work.

2. DESCRIPTION. Description goes well with emotion and atmosphere. For example, the scene where Sasuke finds Itachi in the bloody kitchen. What does the carnage look like? It's bloody, but was there anything broken? Was there blood splattered on the walls? The floors? Was Itachi beaten and bruised? Was he leaning against a cabinet because of his injuries? How did Sasuke feel when he walked into the kitchen? Was he surprised? Horrified? Confused? If you expand scenes that have little description, flesh it out, bring it to life, this can have a significant impact on the reader and the author him/herself. Make your readers question what is going on; have them become part of the conversation; have them think of what may happen next. On the contrary, DON'T overdo the description. This may bore your reader and may drag the story away from the subject.

3. EMOTION. Characters need to express themselves! If they're happy, make them happy. If they are sad, regretful, make them feel that way. If they're angry, boil it! Let it build up before it explodes! This will help the characters stand out like regular human beings. If we had to rewrite it, this is what it would look like:

(For example, this little exchange:
"Just kill him, Sasuke!" Sakura cried abrasively, green eyes flashing and teeth bared. "You swore to yourself you would!"
"Shut up, Sakura!" Sasuke spat, whipping his head over in her direction.)
Something like that, emotion and description combined as one. Just remember one thing: like description, do not overdo with putting adverbs and adjectives. It will only dog down the story.

4. THE THESAURUS. Instead of using the same word over and over again (like 'kiss'), you use another such word that pretty much means the same thing. 'Caress', 'brush', 'graze', 'peck', and 'muzzle' are some of the words that are synonymous to 'kiss'. You can either use a dictionary or thesaurus that you have at home, or look around on the internet to find which word you are looking for.

Overall, this is a story that is just getting started. It's a good story, well-written and straight to the point. This is just a bit of advice I want to give you to improve your story and writing skills, but at the same time I am not forcing you. I mean, it's your fanfic; you do what YOU want to do with it. However, I will gladly like to proofread your chapters before you post them (that is, if you like =)) Keep up the good work.

Grand Phoenix
(P.S. I'm new here, so this is my first and (so far) longest review I've ever done for a story! *sighs with relief* I suppose it's like that for everyone. I hope I didn't sound too "perfect", for lack of a better word.)

lol don't worry, Itasasu is getting to be an odd addiction for me...Hmm I wonder if Itachi can be happy, poor guy!
Please update as soon as you are able.
Thanks...

Me likey. It's very touching. Poor, poor, Itachi. I thought he was emotionless before, but now, I'm not sure. Make another chapter please.

I really like this story so far. I would like it if you would continue it here. Thank you and please update soon!