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Wow I really liked this, you kept to the personalities of the characters quite well :) congrats on a good fanfic x

sweet story. very cute.

Oops, I meant *Florida...stupid keyboard...=P
Still a cute story=D

Aww, so cute=D

I laughed at 80 degrees being a heatwave, I'm from Floria and it gets to be 100 or higher, so 80 is nice and cool. But to people in Maine it is a heatwave!=D

Excellent chappy! It was good for your first "erotica" ...

One thing though, it doesn't hurt THAT bad lol it's just a thin film of skin that's broken... not that I know how it feels but I did study anatomy, It would probably feel like a deep paper cut... not too bad... Anyway, I'm proud of your attempts :P good job :D

Loving it so far but ... where's the flash back? Didja forget or chicken out LOL j/k... I take certain scenes out sometimes too no biggie :)

AWESOME so far :D may I make a suggestion though? Out in a flash back thing so we know how he was revived and the romantic bloom for the two young people ^_^ I love that sort of thing... I'm sure others would too :D update as soon as your technology allows you! ^_^

luv it!

GREAT fic so far! :) I can hardly wait to read the next chapter!

Heya. Great start to this story can't wait to read the next chapter.
Zebidee :)