Well well well...

I thought this would've come.

Actually, this ficlet is pretty good, even if it's written in a very short form. I will expect more of it though.

Anise and Jade is like daughter and father to me, Jade may be cold in his character, but he cares for everyone and we know that. Anise may pretend all cheerful she can, but her feelings can never be hidden from the Necromancer anyway.

You made up quite a good story there. No typos whatsoever, kudos to that as well.

I expect you to write a lot better in the future. Trust me, you have the potential to improve. Don't stop writing.

Best regards,

Rose Sister the Second,

Gloire de Midi

Ahh...such skills in writing a short ficlet...

It may be short...but in terms of writing, it has the potential to grow exponentially and beautifully...

You are already doing well in your writing...just make it as long as possible...it doesn't matter how you want to write it...as long as you write it with all your heart and soul with mind...let it flow through your hands without doubt...

This story had already been implanted a seed of a Rose of Potential, signifying its hidden potential to bloom beautifully...

Rozen is right...your writing skills are...wonderful to watch...I expect no less from a person whom Rozen looked up to...

I look foward reading your other stories as well...may the flower and rose of destiny surround you for eternity until your life expires...

Rose Sisters Elder,

Teresa Rozaria Rose

Ah...a Tales of The Abyss short ficlet. And a well-written one that is.

Basically this story will be a lot more interesting if only you were to willing to write a long story of it. I assume you finish the game already, no?

I will expect a fan-made sequel for this saga though since there are some mysterious left unanswered even after the game. I will like to see your hypothetical theory converted into a story possible in befitting the sequel of this story.

However, I am expecting you to do a lot better than this. This ficlet have impressed me with above average spelling and grammar skills. But if it's from you, I expect a lot more than you did now.

Hate me for being picky if you will, but I pride myself as a reader to keep my comments as valid and as constant as possible. I gave this story a 78% for good grammar and interesting plot, but this story seriously needs to be a lot longer, or you may want to start another story of it.

Until then, best of luck in your writing life. Like I said, I expect your skills to bloom nicely next time.

Rose Sisters the Fifth,

Christina Lace

Hello there, Chelayna.

I heard from Rozen that your story regarding about Tales of The Abyss is quite short, but interesting, so I thought I may drop by and take a good look.

Absolute no typos are found in these 500 words, nice.

And I am really glad that you made Jade, as cold a 30 year old guy he is, at the very best you made him positively good in caring for others especially the part "respecting death wish", which truly signifies his original character in the game.

Poor Anise, she must'vehad a hard time dealing with her sorrow on Ion's death. I was hoping that Fon Master will be included in this ficlet as well, even as a flashback will be good enough. I love romance, mind you. :)

You may want to pur a bit more effort in making the romance scenes, since I feel you have the potential to do so.

Until then, I wish you best of luck in your writing. :D

Rose Sister the first,

Orange Meilandina "Meidi"

P.S: Rozen seems to talk a lot with you, what does he say about me? ( w )

Cute I like that pairing. Always have, as long as it's not romance or anything because Anise is too young for Jade... Anyway, you did a good job on this.

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