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Siry Pop
2008-06-22
ch 10,
abuseGREAT! it's good to see a story about a secundary character, and not centred in Naruto or the others, this one's great, please Update!
c1Usagi9v8Kuchiyose7s
2008-05-14
ch 10,
abuseYou are the most amazing of a fic I've read right off the bat! You definitely need to write more of this story...I'm dying and its only been a few hours! I need more.!
Aufera
2008-05-11
ch 10,
abuseIt's actually very nice to read a Naruto fic that doesn't center around either Sasuke or Naruto
Sempiternus
2008-05-10
ch 10,
abuseAh, amazing. Just fantastic. I really do enjoy this story very much, for both its characterization - I think how you describe Yuugao will be how I always think of her - and how smoothly the plot flows. Already, Kakashi has gone to teach a Genin team. Plus, the added romance between Hayate and Yuugao is fabulous.

(There is one thing I want to mention though. I've noticed in this chapter and others before it that you spell 'sempai' with an 'm'. In my experience, it's usually spelt with a 'n' - senpai - due to the Japanese language not having an independent 'm' sound . . . just thought I'd point that out!)

Keep writing!
Sempiternus.
MissDott
2008-05-04
ch 9,
abuseI cannot wait for you to update this story.

I love your writing.
This story seems to have a lot more grammar mistakes than the rest of your stories.
Although that doesn't make it any less enjoyable to read.

Up date soon!!
Libello
2008-03-21
ch 9,
abuseI'm awestruck. It was a simply amazing story. You just have to write more, there aren't enough of Yugao stories =/. I like the way you write, your vocabulary and the way you connect everything in this lovely story. It was built great from the beginning and continued with that through the story and you describe everything so well too. Keep this up, it was great. Can't wait to read more of this story. Peace out and write more as soon as possible.
Libello
2008-03-20
ch 3,
abuseGreat story so far, only read 3 chapters. I'll give a full review later when I've read the whole story.
sophia666
2008-03-17
ch 9,
abuseGreat story. I love it, from Yuugao, to Hayate and Kakashi and the lovely Rin. Great writing.
KibaCanLickMe
2008-03-16
ch 9,
abuseI'm so glad you updated this. There are so few stories about Yuugao, and yours is probably the most thorough. Its so nice to see them happy together, however I suppose it is bittersweet, since I know what happens to him.
Celira
2008-03-15
ch 9,
abuseThis is definitely one of my favorite stories of yours; the kind of backstory you've developed for a sorely overlooked couple in the intricacies of canon is simply lovely.
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2008-03-15
ch 9,
abuseIt’d been forever since I had time to read any fics, much less chaptered ones, but today I got that little e-mail alert and just said “oh to hell with work” and actually caught up with this one. I’m glad to report that I was not wrong to predict greatness way back in chapter 2 (which was where the story was last time I’d read). So far you’ve set a really consistent story, very plot driven, full of twists and turns. I wasn’t expecting less, since I’m familiar with your previous work, but it’s very obvious there was thinking and planning involved in developing the story. All of the technicalities pointed out, I’ll have to take a few sentences to gush about this particular chapter. Wow. We all knew it was coming, but that was painfully beautiful (I know, those adjectives are so cliché, but I really mean it). The way she handled her feelings for Hayate, her realization of being *human*, her dealing with the past (She might say it’s all it is: past, but there’s still that little hint of detachment that just screams “coping” but not exactly “healed”), just wonderful. The way you’ve built their histories and personalities made their being together seem fated (and will probably make me cry when tragedy strikes) is all coming together in form of some really great story-telling. Hope you keep working on this project (although I think you’ll have a tough time following up this chapter’s events. I’m such a sucker for “meant-to-be” relationships…). And hopefully be able to sneak in some NejiTen in there, hehe. Take care! =)
KibaCanLickMe
2008-02-11
ch 8,
abuseI hope you haven't given up on writing this. There aer very few yugao or hayate stories.
swordbunny4486
2007-12-28
ch 8,
abusenice work. poor yuugao
White Butterfly
2007-09-23
ch 7,
abuse"Her third for knowledge"
Spotted a small spelling mistake there, but otherwise this will be to say I'm enjoying the series so far and find it very interesting.
Toboe LoneWolf
2007-09-15
ch 6,
abuseHOH SNAP. SRSLY.

Okay, so I was wrong about Hayate's illness, but man. Dance of the Crescent Moon for the win. And a-ha, so Kakashi /was/ at Yuugao's Jounin/ANBU trials. And she actually got first blood! Against Kakashi! You go, girl.

It's really sad to see Rin go so "soon" into this fic; and like. Whoa. Yuugao's lost a big support she used to lean on and rely on, and this has got to be a major huge blow to her psyche. That Rin actually thought she was worthless as well, when she first told Yuugao otherwise...ouch. Major ouch. Poor Yuugao, will there be anyone she can trust? Even Hayate's gonna fall too, so it'll be interesting to see how you bring her through that too.

Many cheers and thanks for the twists in events (though Yuugao probably isn't too thrilled. XP).
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