I cant believe you havent continued this story! It has potential to be very very good!! Loved the beginning. I really hope you get around to at least the second chapter.

I liked it, Caim seems a tad off in the second part...no, wait, he wouldn't be all blood-thirsty and revenge happy yet would he? No, he wouldn't, so evreything sounds accurate. Hope you write another chapter soon!

Ya' know? I've never really played this, (if it is a game...) but it has some promise, so I'll go do my research... (Goes to google and searches rapidly)

The begining made me cringe a little but otherwise the story is great, hope ya update soon!