Oh yeah. XD Go Lily! I was kinda hoping she'd be more ** than that... but I also didn't want her to be, cuz they're so cute!

- Chris

The idea of James having a "hickey" from Sirius is pretty funny. It was a cute read.

Two things, though:
1. You can convey yelling without writing in all caps. Italics work well, I think.
And 2. Sirius is portrayed as childish at parts. It's something to try to avoid in the future.

Keep writing!

Aw... cute. Even though if I had been Lily I would have found difficult to believe that SIRIUS had bitten James. I mean, can you picture him doing that?

Aw how sweet :)

so sweet and funny. i couldnt stop laughing at ALL! sirius's love bite.. ahaha

"And she's probably named something sexy like Brianna or Ali or something like that!"
*rolls on the floor, laughing*
You, madam, have a very special place in my heart.

Of course Sirius was laughing hysterically at the matter? What sensible person wouldn't be...from a safe distance away, of course. Kind of like the safe distance I am away from the Marauders, laughing at them for having a time-out corner. But not a safe distance away from you, the author, because I don't think you'll mind knowing that I found this story to be funny.

so sweet and funny and totally random! i loved it! especially the parts about the time out corner and lily freaking out! great job!

That was cute. Really dramatic, I loved when Sirius gets in trouble. But it was a little childish, but it was intended that way, I'm sure.

Heiress

cute and so hilarious!

Aw. That was so cute! I loved the ending! ^.^
Stupid Sirius. :P

That was so funny! I loved the time-out corner and the cynic's point-of-view of their "dancing display." The end was cute, too.
You've got a few gramar errors (like "James' hand" should be "James's hand.") that need fixing, but besides that, I love this story.

i loved this. its funny...n the ending is sweet. and time out corner? amazing.

Ha. That was crazy.

hehe Sirius is such a little kid, giving 'love bites' then whining about his timeout. =]
Very cute