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| DewWater 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseThat's depressing. I liked the ending, about "crying for every pulse" :( |
| Crossover Fiend 2007-08-22 ch 1, | abuseConstructive, eh? (I didn't know I was Canadian) First off, it's very short. That is rarely immediately a bad thing, but I feel that the theme could have been extended into different areas or actions. Related to that, Sakura's thoughts somehow don't seem appropriately involving for the situation. However, juxtaposition between thoughts and actions is effective and brilliant, and I just can't resist a one-chot containing passion. |
| Flying Fox of Snowy Mountai... 2007-08-21 ch 1, | abuseWell, this is not that good. |
| Nachtweiss 2007-08-21 ch 1, | abuseThis is very, very good. It goes beyond the norm that you usually get with these three characters. Love it. (I'm horrible at constructive criticism. I'm sorry.) |