Great start to a story! I love the descriptions - your adjectives are straight on. I'm interested to see what happens next.

Wow, you updated, and it was a great chapter! I can't wait for Hiei to show up! ^ ^

Please update soon. This is a GREAT and AWESOME story.

You have great skill, I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Intense- that was my first reaction. I thought the way you revealed what was going on a bit at a time to be quite brilliant. It didn't have me totally confused, it was just enough to keep me guessing (and reading!) About the tenses, I think both worked well, so go for whichever you want.

I think present tense fits a bit better, as well. But it's your choice, really. :D Again, the chapter was superb, and the details fantastic (you'll be hearing this from me a lot, I can gaurantee(sp?) it). I can see why he would be 'unhinged/grieving', if that's what happened. o_o Anyway, fantastic job, and I can't wait for the next chapter!

PS - I can help with beta reading if you wish. Whatever's easiest for you.

I think I like the present tense usage better than the past tense. That said, I think this second chapter was not only a terrific follow-up to your first chapter, but as always, was not only well narrated (and written), but I loved the flashback sequences as well as Kurama's thoughts and dialog with the 'jailer'. I also wondered, if during his episode, he was in the process of transforming to Yoko. BRAVA on that bit.. it was quite ingenious. I wonder if any other of your readers picked up on it.

wow, off with a great start. i loved the opening. man, what else can go wrong with kurama? hn, your user name is so similar to my friend's nickname. strange... :-)

This is fabulously written! Your descriptions are definitely of superior writing ability. I can't wait for the next chapter! Count me in for the ride.

I am absolutely exhuberated to see the next chapter!! Great writing style; albeit a little technical--don't forget that heart takes precident over impression. Shake a little flavor into your writing from time-to-time and you'll be surprised at your growth. Anyway; back to the fic--I'm hooked!! I look forward to your next update, because this, my friend, is one hell of a plotbunny.

Update soon!!

Yay! It's even better than I thought! I admit, I'm hooked now. I still love yor way of writing. Its descriptive without being too 'out there' and everything seems to flow. I love how you wrote the beginning a lot; it- It was amazing. If only I could write half as good as you. -sigh- Thank you for finally putting this out! Keep it up; I'm really looking forward for more the next chapter! ^-^

Hell NO this doesn't suck! I've always gotten into stories like this, and the way you've started it is curious, and I was immediately hooked. *bites* And so far it's the best bait I've bitten into for awhile. XD I keep asking myself "WTF is going on here?!" and I'm wondering why he's being charged with this. On what grounds, God damn bastards?! >_< I must find out what happens, so please, I'm begging you, write more for this!

And for "Acceptance", just take whatever time you need, but I'd like to see the doujin when it's done, if that's alright. ^^

I also have a question abut the summary: It says that Yusuke and 'Kurama' are sent after them. Do you mean Kuwabara or that they're just going after Hiei? O_o I'm confused.

Yay yay yay! It's out! I do believe I just talked to you about two minutes before I finished this first chappie, but I do love it! I was just how you described that you wanted it to be! The beautiful flow and narrative that you use leaves me in complete envy of your writing, as always. I really do like this. And don't worry OK I'm not going to hold anything against you. Aishiteru-ni Kitsune waka bonzu! Tee Hee...

~Dillio~

I am hooked... completely and utterly with just this first chapter! I love a good, well-written thriller, and this promises to be not only that, but downright excellent! Your prose is well written, well thought out, and very descriptive without being overwhelmingly 'flowery' in nature. You have a good grasp of your characters, and as I've said before, I believe that you must channel Kurama, because you write him so well.