your skill in writing is in full swing here.. so little information but pulls out the actual emotion you hopefully where looking to trigger.. mark of a true writer

not a poke fan ,, but as one shot's go, not too bad ,, too bad the hero has to kick the bucket ,,

I don't get it. How is it that something so short and not with as much detail be incredibly sad? Great job!

Aw... that was a wondersul fic, and really sad...

Aw... that was sad and sweet at the same time, but overall it was a good fic.

Very well written. Sad but noble on his part. NIce job.