I don't think you are a simple story teller, or that this is a simple story, either. You use your vocabulary where it is needed, and never over do anything. Like every writer you need to fix a few things, but that is normal. Give yourself some more credit, please.

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Great job!
I like your characterization of this pairing and the way they interact.
Thanks!
A sequel would be nice...pretty plz;)

Byakuchi is naghty

That was really good! So cute! I luved it! It wood b kool if u made a seguel!!

I love it it's a great story.

Cute story, enjoyed reading it. This couple is the smex.

aw... how cute. it made me all warm and fuzzy inside (not many things do that to me, i'll have you know). very sweet. very, very sweet indeed. i loved it.

BYAKUYA X RENJI = LOVE. It was so cute that Renji missed Byakuya !!

That was really good! You shouldn't talk so down about yourself in your AN. I liked your story and it was written really well. I really enjoyed Byakuya's thoughts and actions, they were in character perfectly! Great job!

Of all the ByaRen/RenBya fics I've read recently, yours is the MOST accurate at capturing their characters. Even more so than my own (I'm sad to say lol), as I tend to make Bayaku-boo a little too uke.

But really, really sweet story, and touching, and a bit tantalizing as well. I hope to see a sequel! I want to see their first morning together. I imagine they will both be a touch awkward!

so good! I like your Byakuya so cold and so hot at the same time...

out of every single byakuren fanfics ive read this past year, yours is the bestest! the characterization was amazing and your writing was superb. i loved how well you portrayed renji and byakuya and paid such attention to minute details. im so glad i found this fic...cant wait to read more of your works

Although I don't like the idea of the Byakuya/Renji pairing myself, I admit this story was very well written!

Aw! lol, too cute