OMG, I know you probably don't ever plan to finish it, but I wanted to tell you anyway its a solid premise. You have a couple errors here and there, "Adleast" should probably be, 'at least' and Considering, not consistering, or consisting.

I think you should work on structuring your paragraphs and sentences better. The way its structured now keeps throwing me out of the story because I'm so focused on trying to figure out how it can be fixed. I hope that helps

I am tremendously excited that you came back to this story! It has been such a long time since I last read this story, so I think I may need to go back and refresh my memory. Thanks for coming back and writing more for this tale. I can't wait till the next installment.

Now pray tell.. who was that "you"?

*rubs hands and grins*

Takes a bit to bring Jake down on his knees.. so what has Sara been up to, eh?

It will be difficult to wait for your next installment. Great job!

hehe, their verbal battles can be very entertaining ;)

Now we surely must know what is going on!

That was really good, please let there be more chapters! I did notice some reoccuring spelling errors here and there, but seemingly mostly due to you writing as if possessed and on a writing spree :)

Curious vision at the ending there

Sweet! Irons is back!

Alright! Now that was a twist!

O, more intersting-ness!

whoa. creepy, but cool!