 astrum-faith 2008-08-11 . chapter 1 Really well-written, detailed but still at the right pace...well done! Thank you for gracing us with your work! (I know this sounds teasing or sarcastic or whatever, but I am being serious...I'm writing this while I'm in a very strange and random mood, okay?)
Although it would have been nice if the last few lines before she drew off her mask were a bit more detailed - it almost feels too sudden for the mask to come off, like there's something missing...
Still, thank you for the wonderful story. :) |