Do you mean "secret" and not "sercet"?

hey
great story.
I hope you will write more fast.
best wishes austrian0crime0girl

Ok I checked your other reviews and guess it's up to me to be the **. I really like the story and I noticed some improvements from chapter one to chapter fifteen but you need some more. First off you need to use proper quotes for dialog. They look like this ". The symbol you are using is an apostrophy which should be used in contractions. For example can't. Next you need to seperate out dialog. You've pluncked too much into one paragraph. Also you need to watch capitization. I is always capitalized, as are the names of people and places. Example Melody, Sienna, Flack and Pizza Hut. Finally you need how to use the three words for to. To is to go to a place. Too means also. Example - you can go too. Then there is two which is the number. I hope these tips help. Your story is really good, now you need to work on grammer and spelling. Good luck, and I will be waiting for an update, 'cause despite the mistakes I really like it.

this is a nice story i likes it great job!

i really love this story and i've been reading it scince it started. this chapter didn't dissapoint. i can't wait till dumb and dumber meet keira!!:) update soon please!!:)

CUTE STORY LOVED IT--CANT WAIT TO READ THE REST!

i love it :)

i love it, is lindsay going to come in ?

I loved the new chapter. And the layout is better now. Well done. Update soon!

Love

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i love it :)

Good concept and idea for a story. But bad length.. would've been better if it was longer. OR if it is gonna be this length, everytime its updated, it should at least be 3 chapters at once.. so you know.. you don't leave us, readers, hanging.

But otherwise.. can't wait where you'll be taking ths story..

Ciao!