*smacks artemis upside the head because of his own stupidity with women*

by the way, what was Holly doing outside the cafe? waiting for artemis?

brittney

whoa i gotta say u have a way with words unlike anybody i've ever known. U could totally get this published if u wanted 2! AMAZING job (although amazing doesn't justify it) and i hope u have luck finding a way to continue your story. I'm looking forward to more. Or rather, i NEED more. plus i love how the romance is so intense but not too overwhelming. nice. haha good luck!

Great way to draw the reader in. I really like it so far.

Oh it wasn't boring! It was great although it's true it's a it short.

flawless

Love it. Awesome. Incredible. A lot more adjectives that would take a long time to type out, but they'd all be good ;)

Oh... Except for SHORT!

Just kidding ;)

Well, personally, I liked this a lot. Seriously, I adore this. Keep it up.

Honey, you're not the only one with "getting there" issues. I have the climax to TDL (or TSU as it's called non) all planned out, but I have no idea how or WHEN i'm gonna get there.

Anywho, wonderful job, as always Livie.

~Muffin with an Evie on top

I'm really enjoying this story! I can't wait to find out why Veronica ends up wanting to kill Artemis! That didn't exactly sound very kind but on the brighter side, this definetely has an original plot. I haven't come across any Artemis Fowl stories like yours. =]

I'm still a bit on edge. Artemis/OC fictions make me nervous and rigid. Not bad. I'm going to read some angst to make me feel better. Bye.

~Shannon

I like I like! I've actually found a AF fic which manages to bring him into romantic situations without making me angry! Congratulations, I must say. And I love the way that as a reader I know she's going to pull a gun on him, just not when, why or how. Excellent idea. I'm hooked.
Even though this story doesn't really keep Artemis in character as far as we know him, I'm certainly not going to point the finger at you as I know from trying (and failing) to do it myself it is damn well near impossible.
Update! Update!
Oh yeah and by the way, if you get a mo and you're feeling lenient maybe have a looksy at my very first fic - "Checkmate". It's on the AF pages somewhere. =D

Awsome Livie!! Me like it very mucho. You write first person very goodly (it IS a word! Look it up! Oh wait, you have to have the dictionary that I haven't published yet...).

Evie

The next chappy seems interesting!

Your story seems amazing! And I'm not lying either. It's got plot, some degree of character depth ( I'm sure that'll increase.), and beautiful grammer.

Um I will continue to read this, I think, but the thing is, I have a big problem with Artemis/OC unless I really like the OC. It makes me feel very strange. Hopefully this will turn out to be very good.

~Shannon

Oh I like. Holly would have played the part better tehehehe.

~Shannon