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Lord Sia 2008-08-15 ch 1,	abuseIt's kind of funny; your writing needs a lot of work (though so far this seems to one of your better works) but the dark, gory and morbid stories are really good. It would be that much better if you improved your writing though, spelling and grammar are ok, the problem lies in the flow of the text. It feels a bit forced and artificial. Take your time, describe everyday things and build up some suspense and it will be so much better...
Wildfire 2008-04-29 ch 1, anon.	abuseContinue with this, and please add more depth to the story and more description to the deaths, and how they happen.
G 2008-02-02 ch 1, anon.	abuseWell.. It could be great.. but things just happened without any reason at all. You just merged the two. Your writing is much better than I remember from reading some of your earlier works.
The Jester of Fools 2007-10-24 ch 1,	abuseFor all intent and purposes, it is a good baseline. All the deaths at once seemed very rushed, not to mention suspicious. You could have strung them out a little more. I personally like Nabiki so I thought that she didn't deserve to be killed. If you tweaked a few concepts, it would make for a great story.
KitsuneOverlord 2007-10-08 ch 1,	abuseWell, damn. I've never seen a Ranma/Death Note crossover before. I have to say that it was interesting at the very least. This is a oneshot? Damn. I would like to see more of it.
jusenkyo ruler 2007-10-06 ch 1,	abuseI love it please continue
JuanG 2007-09-26 ch 1,	abusewish it was not a one shot. pretty good though. by the way, I am kyuubisbane.
Shaithan 2007-09-18 ch 1,	abuseVery nice story. Evil and cruel. I like it very much. Well done. Mit freundlichem Gruss Shaithan
........... 2007-09-05 ch 1, anon.	abusewow another death note ranma cross...u r the second one heres a silver medal.
Firehedgehog 2007-09-05 ch 1,	abusecan we get a sequel?
RisteardXD4 2007-08-30 ch 1, anon.	abuseI'd like to say that this story , in which others may say was shallow and was more simply a revengefic or was focused purely on character death, that is completely in line with what you usually write, and in a good way. This is a Ranma I would like to see more of and in more worlds, flicking in and out of existence throughout the multiverse in order to extol death upon those who have earned it, 'til finally Ranma meets with the Grim Reaper him/herself, and challenges he/she for the right to be Death Incarnate, one whose influence and power is on par with the Incarnates of Order, Chaos, Time, Fate, and Destiny. Whether Ranma wins or not is based on whether or not he has incorporated the Death Note and Jennu into himself so that he only need to visualize how a being shall die. Depending on that beings level of willpoer compared to Ranma's level of willpower, that being either dies or lives, at least until Ranma has worn that being down sufficiently enough that they no longer have enough willpower to resist the power of the Death Note. And first, of course, we shall start with the Sailor Moon cast, for the noble task of prevent the Hell On Earth that would come to be known as Crystal Tokyo...Kukukuku
Opt1mus 2007-08-30 ch 1,	abuseYour entire lore of Death Note is kinda... wrong, although the story was good, so I don't care. Good Work
KaiserPhoenix 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseSometimes I wonder why I chance your fics. Kira had his reasons for what he did, he didn't kill anyone left and right out of pure bloodlust. Kasumi has her own problewms, but she is not someone I would describe evil. If you wanted to off her, death by exhaustio would have been a better idea. Seeing as she's been taking care of her family for so many years. I won't bother mentioning the rest. Peace
Spanner 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseThis story was rather... pointless, I'd have to say. Even from the point of view of a revengefic it's not very good, as very few of the characters had an opportunity to do anything for Ranma to get revenge on them for (the offenses they did offer him were hardly worth the gristly deaths he offered them in exchange). As presented, it comes across simply as a story of power corrupting. Ranma gets his hands on power over life and death at an early age, and grows up treating people's lives as being of little value, snuffing them out more or less on a whim. Unfortunately, I can't see this sort of corruption as being in Ranma's character. After all, in the original he grew up with Genma, an unbelievably corrupt man, and still developed into a relatively kind and honorable character. While I could see the Death Note changing Ranma from the character we know, it's hard to believe that he would become this cold and callous. So, since Ranma isn't Ranma, he becomes an Original Character. So, this becomes a story in which an Original Character steps in and massacres the cast of Ranma 1/2. "The Note" is a mediocre offering in an already tasteless genre of Ranma 1/2 fanfiction.
dragonwings7373 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseinteresting story kepp it up. Update soon pleas. :)

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