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Reviews For: Caroline

Dragon-Girl-Begins777 2008-07-31 ch 1, anon.	abusevery good ending indeed. P.S.: Caleb is a right scumbag.
ShadowedBeneathMoonlight 2008-01-21 ch 1,	abuseExcellent job! I especially liked the author's note, lol! :D
lilynx 2007-11-21 ch 1,	abuseIt's amazing. I really wish there was more. Maybe a sequel about what Caroline and Anton are doing on their adventures? (hint, hint) lilynx winks I comment on one of thoughts about male romantic leads. I certainly think that most of the people who read romances are female, and as such, want this: the perfect guy from a female's POV, but with those seemingly random/obtuse comments that remind us of boys we do know (and all their pitfalls). But that's just what I think, you don't even have to read any of this. Anyway, great job on writing a captivating story. Your dialouge is absolutely perfect. lilynx narrows eyes in jealousy
MBDTA 2007-11-19 ch 1,	abuseMale characters are weird. I liked this though. It was a bit confusing - the part about the castle and the theives and . . . basically all the background information. It seemed like part of a larger story - only an excerpt. which makes it confusing. this has a lot of potential if you wrote what all happened before this chapter or wrote a scene where Anton explains everything.
Elena Takami 2007-10-21 ch 1,	abuseHey =) I'm glad to see an outline for how True Colours should have gone, but I hope you'll be able to continue it anyway. It's a good ending, I think; it's mostly happy, but not completely neatly wrapped up. I just think I'd like it even better with more words =P As for A/N point 2, in some version there's a Wicked Stepmother. But I think the true villain of BatB is human nature; the Beast's arrogance that got him transformed, the merchant's cowardice, Beauty's passiveness, and everyone's inability to just tell the truth plainly. A/N point 3: I guess it depends who you're writing for. I personally prefer awkward romances, where both sides are human; they might squabble, they might drive each other mad sometimes, but at the end of the day they'll support each other and they'll work towards staying together. That seems much more like true love to me than the easy, perfect love of a romance novel, where staying together is more inertia than anything else. =)
Sling the Jukka 2007-09-04 ch 1,	abuseHmm, what can I say? I liked that paragraph at the end about males thinking differently than females. How true. And isn't Mr. Darcy sweet? Yes, I liked the story too, although there was one line (run/ran like hell) that I didn't think really fit with the style because that language just isn't used in fairy tales. And to me, Anton did seem a bit distant. Try descibing what he's doing as he's talking (shifting uncomfortably in his chair, staring at Caroline with a piercing gaze, absent-mindedly tapping his foot on the floor- whatever). I didn't understand why Anton (good name choice) was considered a beast. Because he threatened Caleb? Did he look like a beast? Good job for writing a Beauty and the Beast story. One of my favourite fairy tales.
Thai Libre 2007-09-02 ch 1,	abuseI liked it. I think I would have perfered that you write the whole story out. But this was very good also. Keep Writing!
KyrieofAccender 2007-09-01 ch 1,	abuseI loved the bit about the cucumber and the moose, and the "what's for lunch" thing. Hilarious! Although the fact that men are really slow not to pick that up has little relevancy on my review for this lovely little story... I really liked it! And if I wasn't so blastedly cold, I'd go on about what precicely I liked. But it was a great twist, and a fun read. Thanks! ~Kyrie
Allergic-to-Paradox 2007-08-29 ch 1,	abuseAW!! Does this mean that you won't finish the long version of the story?? pouts A cucumber to a moose? g EH? Voices?? What Voices? “What does that mean?” “It means that we should probably get out of the castle as fast as possible.” g g ...I think you may be right about the way you structured the story... It reads more like the final chapter, rather than a one-shot. Or is that not what you meant? Because for a last chapter it would be fine, if a little rushed. There's a thought. Do all oneshots have to be self-contained? Or can you just assume that everyone knows the story and just jump right in? hmm... "This basically means that fans of romance are doomed to disappointment. I thought you ought to know." lol I agree wit Evo422, I like that Anton kept his secrets rather than lose her, but if he'd told her right away, would she have stayed? wants more story If that oneshot was under 3,0 words, how long was your author's note? g Cheers, Allyp
shortstef 2007-08-28 ch 1,	abuseThe great BelleEve disease strikes again i.e impatientness (and I say this with great affection and admiration). I think I have long since stopped expecting completed full-length stories from you...I was enjoying this story and it frustrates me that its over so quickly, but hey. I never could write short stories; I ramble, so full marks to you for getting all the major points in. For some reason it reminded me of Sunshine by Robin McKinley, and you know its just crying out for a sequel (as that book was). And I whole-heartedly agree with what you say about romance; unfortunately it seems I will always be one of those people doomed to be eternally disappointed, but such is life.
Evo422 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseYour A/N's tend to put a bit of a damper on my romantic ideals, which isn't bad, per se, as I tend to get a bit wrapped up in them sometimes and I need a bit of cynicism to knock me down from Cloud 9. But I think I agree with the Blonde Charger in that you can't really make your male lead convincing if you don't at least make guesses at what he's thinking and lead the reader to agree with your guesses. Of course, you don't have to write from his POV and have him gush about how purty and intelligent and perfect Beauty is (as I am in the habit of doing). You're right, of course, when it comes to male characters. Most of mine thus far have been manifestations of the sort of guy I'd swoon for: one who cares more about intelligence than appearance (hah, wish me good luck with that one!) and who would sacrifice their own happiness for mine (LOL: self-centered much?). But I'm working on the anti-romantic-hero male character currently, which doesn't necessarily mean he's realistic, but simply that he's not dreamy and handsome and uber-supportive. Anton in this one shot sort of puts me in mind of Robin McKinley's Beast. (For the record, I haven't read 'Beauty' in forever, so my comparisons may be off here.) Anyways, I never really felt connected to him because he always felt so omniscient and distant and not really angsty enough. I DID feel a lot more connected to the Anton of 'True Colours' than to the one-shot Anton, even though we only saw him briefly in the longer story. I don't know: I think it was how Trenan helped to flesh out him in our minds, or perhaps how the glimpses we saw showed such vulnerability and humanity. I wouldn't say that in 'Caroline' he has no personality, because I could sense remorse and regret when he was telling her about how he'd made the agreement with her father. Of course, that was maybe just me imposing my own idea of who the Beast is onto Anton. I don't know. To be honest, I probably would have spent the entirety of this review gushing were it not for the A/N, which made me go back and rethink everything. Now I'm having an existential melt-down. (Haha... It's not quite that serious; don't worry.) Now onto the gushing. I LOVED the idea of her father and Anton lying to her, both for their own selfish purposes. Why did I love it? I don't know. It's human. People look out for their own interests. If you're shooting for realism, then you got it there. I liked that the Beast allowed her to go on thinking herself a terrible person because he didn't want to lose her. It's cowardice, perhaps, but it's how anyone in his position would act. Another point for realism. As for the structure, I'm really not that attuned to such things, so I really can't say if it's fundamentally wrong or not. Though everything I wrote might lead you to think otherwise, I loved this story, as I love all your stories. You're a super gifted writer (Yes! Super gifted! Such mature word choice on my part) and I don't think there's a story you've written that I haven't enjoyed immensely. I still would've loved more ANGSTING!Beast (I'm addicted to ANGSTING!Beast, for the record), but I can see you're shying away from that. But-- as you've said before-- Beast IS melodramatic cheesiness. Fairy Tales aren't real, so we can't really expect them/the characters to fit in the contexts of modern life. I never thought of Darcy as fake, to be honest, because he lived in a time period when men of high society WERE polite and well-bred and raised to be chivalric (or at least I'm led to believe). And he was proud and flawed, which made him a helluva lot more believable than Bingley-- whom I happen to love despite his flatness. Of course, Rochester (whom Blonde Charger brought up) is even MORE believable because of his intent to decieve Jane for his own happiness, his affairs, etc... But it's interesting to note that neither Charlotte Bronte or Jane Austen married. They probably didn't know that much about men, and yet their works have endured for centuries. It's probably because they DIDN'T know that much about men that we all love their novels. So--in conclusion of the longest review/barely coherent rambling I've ever written-- I don't think we ought to stress about making perfectly realistic men. We're writing Fairy Tales, which should tip a reader off to the fact that most of what's happening would NEVER happen in real life. Are we setting ourselves up for romantic disappointment? Maybe. But if we can find a balance between realism and fantasy by having more outlandish characters act with universal human tendencies (like greed, cowardice, etc.) then I think we'll be okay. shrugs
Bingo7 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseSo true, about your side note thingy. I had to nod at the male romantic part. I have seven brothers and sometimes when I through the eyes of males, I think, 'wait this is no real boy...' I really enjoyed you story btw!
slipshod 2007-08-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseloved it. love your voice. love the creative turn of the whole thing. i think it's very well written.
vanderspektacular 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseLoved it!! Your writing is beautiful, it flows really well and just sounds so musical and nice. Glad to finally know how things turn out in "True Colours," as well!
Blonde Charger 2007-08-27 ch 1,	abuseCan I just admit now how much your fanfictions really do rock? And this is no critisism of them at all, but I tend to find your author's notes add something else to your writing. Not only did I find it hard to stop laughing, but you lay out your ideas so clearly, it's difficult not to think 'My God, you have so much mental organisation'. Although, I have to confess, the structure of this one-shot isn't your best. Caroline's character makes up for that completely. Anton I'm not so sure about. I mean, you're right, that a male character is very hard to write convincingly if you're not actually male, but Anton has almost no personality. I'm kind of disappointed, to be honest. Surely it's alright to write a male character from the perspective of someone else? As in, they notice little mannerisms about the male character, and describe to the reader what THEY think it means. I suppose you could get around the whole 'I have no idea about the male mind' with that. I wanted to ask your opinion, really, on how YOU would write a REAL man in a book. Would you write in his POV but keep it brief, or would you never have the male character around if a female character was not there to describe them? Phew. That took a long time to get out. PM me, would you? Thanks. But, after all that rambling, I thought YOU ought to know, I enjoyed this very much! Especially the AN, and your little rant about Darcy. Becky P.S. Completely related to your fic, I swear, I'm just curious, but Darcy or Rochester? I always thought Rochester was just that bit more real than Darcy, who I thought was such a 2D character. shrugs I'm sure I will be mauled by Austen fans, but Rochester just has more... presence on the page. Darcy always struck me as a little odd and confusing.

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