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| anonymous 2008-06-04 ch 1, anon. | abuseSniff. SNIFF! Ah...Is that the scent of...lemon I smell? |
| FullMetalLover1 2008-05-22 ch 1,  | abuseWow! This is great, great, great! I loved it!! :D |
| rue 2008-03-31 ch 1, anon. | abuse"I feel the same," he told her hoarsely. ^^I really think this line is kind of weak for the moment. Without changing the character of his reply, you could have it: "Me too. It's always been you," he told her hoarsely. (you could add an 'echoing her words' if the repitition bothers you) I just think it would be more natural. (i mean, who actually says "I feel the same" in these situations? it sounds a little stiff) Otherwise like it though. Quite. |
| Fantasy Fan Girl 2007-12-22 ch 1, | abuseSo cute. Impulse decisions are sometimes the best. I didn't mean to get all deep. Really good story, very cute. Keep writing. Fantasy Fan Girl |
| Shinjite Florana 2007-10-16 ch 1, | abuseOH! XP great story! |
| flamingo174 2007-10-11 ch 1, | abuseAw I loved it, it was so cute! |
| heaven711 2007-09-02 ch 1, | abuseOMG I LOVE IT! i cant believe u ended it there! -HEAVEN |
| LittleChemist 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abusegood and hot, the temp has just risen. Great job! |
| youkai chick supreme 2007-09-01 ch 1, | abusewo! i don't even care that you never explained how ed made it back from the other side! i don't care! all i care about is how frigging cute this was! and good. nicely done. however, what a cliffhanger ending! well, wait no, that's not the right word... i believe i know what's about to happen, i did take sex ed in middle school... but dammit! i need words! words to go with the horribly dirty pictures in my mind! ah... i loved it. |
| Harryswoman 2007-08-29 ch 1, | abusethis was great! |
| ShadowDragon-24 2007-08-27 ch 1, | abuseAww, it's so cute ^_^ Sad in the begining, but cute! P.S. If I were you, I PROBABLY wouldv'e put this under the 'M' rating; seeing as it has slight references to, well...a 'lemon' as they call it :P Just a little thing I felt would be important to point out; I mean no offence ^_~ |
| Artificial Life Creator 2007-08-27 ch 1, | abuseaw! |
| LiRiNCaNdY 2007-08-27 ch 1, | abuseUPDATE!! please great story |
| Automailjunkie44 2007-08-27 ch 1, | abuseGreat fic! I loved it! I wish u would add more too it! |